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These figures illustrate the life cycle of Salmon, which is one of species of large fish.

These figures illustrate the life cycle of Salmon, which is one of species of large fish. Life cycle is demonstrated in three stages including fry, smolt and adult salmon states and thier habitats. Salmon's life cycle is initiated beneath the revier, where salmon eggs are laid. Parent salmons lay thier eggs beside small stones and reeds in the upper rivers owing to the laminar flow of water, moving at a steady gentle pace. Neewborn salmon spend aroun 5 or 6 months until their developmental program make them fry salmons between 3 to 8 centimeters long. Fry salmons then move to the lower river which turbulent rapid flow of water is present. They spend approximately 4 years at the inferior rivers until they became smolt salmon fish. On the other hand, smolt fish live adulthood period of thier lives in the open seas which is in contrast to living in rivers. By the ninth year they are ready for reproduction and sharing genes and in turn, go back to places like they were born. Similarly, adult salmons ley eggs in slow moving waters and next to reeds in order to begin a new cycle of life.
These figures illustrate the
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of Salmon, which is one of species of large fish.
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Life
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cycle
is demonstrated
in three stages including fry,
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smolt
and adult salmon states and
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thier
habitats.

Salmon's
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life
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cycle
is initiated
beneath the
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revier
, where salmon eggs
are laid
. Parent salmons lay
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thier
eggs beside
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small
stones and reeds in the upper
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rivers
owing to the laminar flow of water, moving at a steady gentle pace.
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Neewborn
salmon spend
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aroun
5 or 6 months until their developmental program
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them fry salmons
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between 3 to 8
centimeters long.

Fry salmons then
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move
to the lower
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river
which turbulent rapid flow of water is present. They spend approximately 4 years at the inferior
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rivers
until they became
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smolt
salmon fish.
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,
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smolt
fish
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live
adulthood period of
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thier
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lives
in the open seas which is
in contrast
to living in
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rivers
. By the ninth year they are ready for reproduction and sharing genes and in turn, go back to places like they
were born
.
Similarly
, adult
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salmons
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ley
eggs in slow moving waters and
next
to reeds in order to
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begin
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cycle
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life
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IELTS essay These figures illustrate the life cycle of Salmon, which is one of species of large fish.

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