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These days the number of choices of entertainment is more available than it ever was thanks to the advanced technology.

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These days the number of choices of entertainment is more available than it ever was thanks to the advanced technology. As a result, many people across the world have displayed increased preference in the genre of thriller and suspense based crime books, TV series, and films. In this essay, I will examine why this trend is increasing and explain why I feel that it can positively impact society. Two main factors are behind the rise in popularity of crime based books and shows. The first is the human nature of many viewers that they like to solve the mystery and puzzle from the criminality shows, where they invoke their imagination and try to find out the real culprit before it broadcasted in that particular show. For example, on social media, many people had guessed the king in The Game Of Thrones before the series had disclosed that a secret. Second is the interesting content from novels attracts the majority of the crowd. In other words, people feel tired and dull because of their fast-paced life, which makes them to choose books, who have more exciting, thrilling, and stimulating stories that can refresh their mood. In my view, the popularity of this trend has benefits for both viewers and readers. By watching crime shows and movies, there is an increase in awareness about safety among society, and daily viewers know how to deal with attacks as well as attackers. In the news, for instance, we heard many bravery and alertness stories of citizens against criminals. Furthermore, books containing crime, detective stories inspired many producers to produce award-winning movies, which ultimately give a positive message to the world. Sherlock Holmes, Harry Potter, are some examples of novel based films that increase awareness about criminals and give friendship values to the people. In conclusion, as people are continually finding an exciting, curious type of entertainment, crime-related novels and TV programs have enormously become famous. From my point of view, it can be advantageous for society in terms of safety and values.
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As a result
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across the world have displayed increased preference in the genre of thriller and suspense based
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crime
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books
, TV series, and films. In this essay, I will examine why this trend is increasing and
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explain
why I feel that it can
positively
impact society.

Two main factors are behind the rise in popularity of
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crime
based
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books
and
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shows
. The
first
is the human nature of
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many
viewers that they like to solve the mystery and puzzle from the criminality
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shows
, where they invoke their imagination and try to find out the real culprit
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before
it broadcasted in that particular
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show
.
For example
, on social media,
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many
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people
had guessed the king in The
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Game Of Thrones
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before
the series had disclosed that a secret. Second is the interesting content from novels attracts the majority of the crowd.
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,
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people
feel tired and dull
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because
of their
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fast
-paced life, which
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makes
them to choose
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books
, who have more exciting, thrilling, and stimulating stories that can refresh their mood.

In my view, the popularity of this trend has benefits for both viewers and readers. By watching
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crime
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shows
and movies, there is an increase in awareness about safety among society, and daily viewers know how to deal with attacks
as well
as attackers. In the news,
for instance
, we heard
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many
bravery and alertness stories of citizens against criminals.
Furthermore
,
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books
containing
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crime
, detective stories inspired
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many
producers to produce award-winning movies, which
ultimately
give a
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positive
message to the world. Sherlock Holmes, Harry Potter, are
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some
examples of novel based films that increase awareness about criminals and give friendship values to the
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people
.

In conclusion
, as
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people
are
continually
finding an exciting, curious type of entertainment, crime-related novels and TV programs have
enormously
become
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famous
. From my point of view, it can be advantageous for society in terms of safety and values.
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IELTS essay These days the number of choices of entertainment is more available than it ever was thanks to the advanced technology.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
338 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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