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Write advantage and disadvantage of the mobile phone

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Mobile phone is very crucial for everyone. mobile phone give information for everything. It has many companies like oppo, iPhone, mi, redmi etc. It has many apps. It has use chat for friends, relatives etc. We are conversation for everyone. we are enjoy very much with mobile phone. I have two mobile phones. His companies is Samsung and one is techno. We are playing games in Mobile phone. There are many disadvantages of mobile phone: -Children's effects eyes with mobile phone. We are see mobile phone every day one hour.
Mobile
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phone
is
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very
crucial for everyone.
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mobile
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phone
give information for everything. It has
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many
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companies
like
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oppo
, iPhone, mi,
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redmi
etc. It has
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many
apps.
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It
has
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use
chat for friends, relatives etc. We are conversation for everyone.
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we
are
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enjoy
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very
much with mobile
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phone
. I have two mobile
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phones
. His
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companies
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is
Samsung and one is techno. We are playing games in Mobile
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phone
. There are
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many
disadvantages of mobile
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phone
: -Children's effects eyes with mobile
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phone
. We are
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see
mobile
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phone
every day one hour.
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IELTS essay Write advantage and disadvantage of the mobile phone

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
90 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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