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These days, more people are going to university than in the past. They start work later in life and with higher qualifications. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

These days, more people are going to university than in the past. They start work later in life and with higher qualifications. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? WyqRD
Youths aiming for higher education are a very common scenario seen now a days. They prefer going to a university since they want to be highly educated. I agree with the above statement, however there are some negative effects for attaining highest qualification. Education is the key to a successful future. Children nowadays are very particular about their education. They want to be highly educated from the most reputed colleges so as to get a good job in the future. Traditionally, parents weren't concerned about the education of their child as they want their lamb to be married as early as possible as they want to shed all the responsibility of their child. Lately, youths are capable enough to arrange the fees for their college or university as they don't want to be a burden on their parents. Generations don't want the society to call their parents a poor stigma of the society and instead they tend to work hard to earn a good living. For example, youths studying in Canada do part time jobs which are not only a source of income for them, but they can gain self independence and not asking the families to pay the loans for further education. On the other hand, some parents married off their children so that at least amount of money could be spent on them. The youths at that time weren't even aware about the positive effects of education and the job prospects. They were made to do farming, which was the only source of income at that time. Agricultural practices were carried out in the areas where education did not gain much prevalence due to lack of awareness. I would like to conclude my essay by stating that education is the only means by which individuals can gain acceptance in the society. This makes them self reliant and independent in many areas. While on the other hand an uneducated person will always have negative thoughts and an never gain independence economically.
Youths aiming for higher
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education
are a
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very
common scenario
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seen
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now a days
. They prefer going to a university since they
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want
to be
highly
educated. I
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agree
with the above statement,
however
there are
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some
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negative
effects for attaining
A determiner is probably missing here: "the highest".
highest
qualification.

Education is the key to a successful future. Children nowadays are
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very
particular about their
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education
. They
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want
to be
highly
educated from the most reputed colleges
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so as to
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get
a
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good
job in the future.
Traditionally
,
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parents
weren't concerned about the
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education
of their child as they
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want
their lamb to
be married
as early as possible as they
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want
to shed all the responsibility of their child. Lately, youths are capable
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enough
to arrange the fees for their college or university as they don't
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want
to be a burden on their
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parents
. Generations don't
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want
the society to call their
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parents
a poor stigma of the society and
instead
they tend to work
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hard
to earn a
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good
living.

For example
, youths studying in Canada do
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part time
jobs which are not
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only
a source of income for them,
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but
they can
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gain
self independence and not asking the families to pay the loans for
further
education.

On the other hand
,
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some
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parents
married off their children
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so
that at least amount of money could
be spent
on them. The youths at that time weren't even aware about the
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positive
effects of
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education
and the job prospects. They
were made
to
The usual collocation for an activity ending in "-ing" is "go" not "do" or "play." Revise: "go farming".
do farming
, which was the
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only
source of income at that time. Agricultural practices
were carried
out in the areas where
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education
did not
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gain
much prevalence due to lack of awareness.

I would like
to conclude
my essay by stating that
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education
is the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
means by which individuals can
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gain
acceptance in the society. This
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makes
them
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self reliant
and independent in
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many
areas. While
on the other hand
an uneducated person will always have
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negative
thoughts and
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an
never
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gain
independence
economically
.
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IELTS essay These days, more people are going to university than in the past. They start work later in life and with higher qualifications. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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5 paragraphs
332 words
6.0
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