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These days, more and more people study or live abroad. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this.

These days, more and more people study or live abroad. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this. bYrdQ
The popularity of studying and living abroad is increasing every year. This essay will discuss some positive and negative aspects of this trend. First of all, there are two main advantages of studying abroad like learning a new language and studying new occupations. Firstly, when students or adults live or study abroad, they will definitely learn a new language whether they want or not. It helps people to extend their knowledge and improve cognitive abilities. Secondly, the living in another country gives opportunity to find a high - paid job. Knowing another language and having a local visa make you more competitive and demanded. For example, my brother, who works as a florist, moved to Poland and he feels himself much better than in his mother country. On the other hand, moving to another country has some obvious drawbacks. Firstly, people commence to forget about their native culture. Of course, some of them come back and try to use the knowledge that they have learnt by studying or living there in order to improve the situation in their own countries. However, in most of the cases, people assimilate and stay to live there. Secondly, it causes many problems in terms of politics and society. Not everyone who lives there feels themselves comfortable. Some of them are discriminated by the skin colour or race, thereby causing a negative relationship between countries. For instance, in Russia Chinese and African students discriminate because of race. To sum up, although there are advantages of living abroad like learning a new culture and chance to find a good job, it has extremely bad problems with discrimination and forgetting about their own countries.
The popularity of
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and
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abroad
is increasing every year. This essay will discuss
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positive
and
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aspects of this trend.

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First of all
, there are two main advantages of
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studying
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abroad
like learning a
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new
language and
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studying
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new
occupations.
Firstly
, when students or adults
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live
or study
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abroad
, they will definitely learn a
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new
language whether they want or not. It
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helps
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people
to extend their knowledge and
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improve
cognitive abilities.
Secondly
, the
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living
in another
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country
gives opportunity to find a high
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paid job. Knowing another language and having a local visa
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make
you more competitive and demanded.
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, my brother, who works as a florist,
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moved
to
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Poland and
he feels himself much better than in his mother country.

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, moving to another
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has
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obvious drawbacks.
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commence to forget about their native culture.
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of them
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back and try to
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use
the knowledge that they have
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or
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there in order to
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improve
the situation in their
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countries
.
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people
assimilate and stay to
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, it causes
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problems in terms of politics and society. Not everyone who
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lives
there feels themselves comfortable.
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of them
are discriminated
by the skin
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colour
or race, thereby causing a
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negative
relationship between
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countries
.
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, in Russia Chinese and African students discriminate
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because
of race.

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living
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abroad
like learning a
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new
culture and chance to find a
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good
job, it has
extremely
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bad
problems with discrimination and forgetting about their
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own
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countries
.
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IELTS essay These days, more and more people study or live abroad. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
7
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