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These days, many students

These days, many students GL32B
These days, many students have difficulties staying focused while at school. Tedious lessons and the distraction from technological devices could be attributable to a lack of concentration amongst pupils. Both teachers and students should come up with solutions to solve this problem. Reasons are varied, one of which comes from the outdated teaching method. Learners would indeed feel more excited if the lessons are more activity-based and involve students entirely in the process of learning. However, some teachers apply old-fashioned approaches, in which they write all information on blackboards, and students will copy everything down their notebooks. This method is rather theoretical and can discourage students from studying. Another reason is the overuse of gadgets during classes. If children are engrossed in playing devices, they will hardly learn anything. Gradually, their academic achievements would decline, and they can even pass exams. Several solutions must be applied to solve the problem. The first and perhaps the most effective way is to modernize the teaching method. Teachers should use images and videos to make their lessons more vivid and easy to remember. In case of having much free time, these educators could also organize extracurricular activities to change the atmosphere and motivate students to study seriously. Besides, imposing a ban on the use of technological devices would be advantageous. Teachers can educate what students might benefit from the responsible use of these gadgets. In this way, students would know whether or not they should use devices. In conclusion, children are now becoming less attentive in school. There are many reasons behind this trend. However, with the right actions, it is possible to create an exciting environment for pupils.
These days,
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students
have difficulties staying focused while at school. Tedious lessons and the distraction from technological devices could be attributable to a lack of concentration amongst pupils. Both
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teachers
and
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students
should
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come
up with solutions to solve this problem.

Reasons
are varied
, one of which
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comes
from the outdated teaching method. Learners would
indeed
feel more excited if the lessons are more activity-based and involve
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students
entirely
in the process of learning.
However
,
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some
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teachers
apply
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old
-fashioned approaches, in which they write all information on blackboards, and
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students
will copy everything down their notebooks. This method is
rather
theoretical and can discourage
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
from studying. Another reason is the overuse of gadgets during classes. If children
are engrossed
in playing devices, they will hardly learn anything.
Gradually
, their academic achievements would decline, and they can even pass exams.

Several solutions
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must
be applied
to solve the problem. The
first
and perhaps the most effective way is to modernize the teaching method.
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Teachers
should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
images and videos to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
their lessons more vivid and easy to remember. In case of having much free time, these educators could
also
organize extracurricular activities to
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change
the atmosphere and motivate
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students
to study
seriously
.
Besides
, imposing a ban on the
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use
of technological devices would be advantageous.
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Teachers
can educate what
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students
might benefit from the responsible
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use
of these gadgets. In this way,
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students
would know
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whether or not
they should
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use
devices.

In conclusion
, children are
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now
becoming less attentive in school. There are
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many
reasons behind this trend.
However
, with the right actions, it is possible to create an exciting environment for pupils.

IELTS essay These days, many students

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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