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The maps show the changes that happened in the town of Frenton between 1990 and 2012.

The maps show the changes that happened in the town of Frenton between 1990 and 2012. j8Dyp
The two pictures illustrate a number of important changes which took place in the tiny city of Freston after the construction of commercial buildings over the period from 1990 to 2012. It is clear that the most noteworthy innovation was a shift toward a partly residential area which became a modernized place with the presence of various complex apartments and recreational facilities, but fewer trees and open spaces. In 1990, on the left-hand side of the high street, the playing fields with trees in the south were chopped down to make a way for high-rise buildings. Moreover, in the Northwest, the remaining unchanged was demonstrated in the school area, while the bank below the school was demolished for the construction of a restaurant for entertaining purposes. In place of library and hospital still existed in the original sites until 2012. The hospital, however, became bigger to cater to numerous patients. Besides that, in the South, the open files with plenty of trees were erected to and replaced by technopark. Looking at the right-hand side of the high street, while the housing estate in West transformed into the complex apartment which accommodated more residents, the flats were knocked down and became vacant land. Similarly, the café and park in the center were removed, and instead, the addition of a hotel and golf course for recreation. Finally, both the theatre and supermarket are located in the South being converted into cinema and supermarket.
The two pictures illustrate a number of
important
changes
which took place in the tiny city of
Freston
after the construction of commercial buildings over the period from 1990 to 2012.

It is
clear
that the most noteworthy innovation was a shift toward a partly residential area which became a modernized place with the presence of various complex apartments and recreational facilities,
but
fewer trees and open spaces.

In 1990, on the
left
-hand side of the high street, the playing fields with trees in the south
were chopped
down to
make
a way for high-rise buildings.
Moreover
, in the Northwest, the remaining unchanged
was demonstrated
in the school area, while the bank below the school
was demolished
for the construction of a restaurant for entertaining purposes. In place of library and hospital
still
existed in the original sites until 2012. The hospital,
however
, became bigger to cater to numerous patients.
Besides
that, in the South, the open files with
plenty
of trees
were erected
to and replaced by
technopark
.

Looking at the right-hand side of the high street, while the housing estate in West transformed into the complex apartment which accommodated more residents, the flats
were knocked
down and became vacant land.
Similarly
, the café and park in the center
were removed
, and
instead
, the addition of a hotel and golf course for recreation.
Finally
, both the
theatre
and supermarket
are located
in the South
being converted
into cinema and supermarket.
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IELTS essay The maps show the changes that happened in the town of Frenton between 1990 and 2012.

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