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It is ongoing debate whether economy or climate has more impact on individuals daily life

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GsjsjIt is deemed by a section of society that individuals life is affected by climate while others believe that economy has a great impact on their way of living. l consider that economy of a nation has more impact on dwellers life. Nevertheless, I shall shed light on both perspectives. To commence with, the point of view of those people who claim that climate impact masses life. Firstly, according to weather condition people enjoy their life as in cold weather, people prefer to stay at home and spend their quality of time with family members. Along with this, during pleasent days, the majority of youngsters engage in outdoor activities such as cricket or basketball and thus different tasks are being done by individuals according to weather condition. Moreover, due to natural calamities people are facing a lot of difficulties such flood in gujrat in 2007 which destroys thousands of Gujaratis home and they lost their families and thus life of masses if effected by climate. However, on the other hand, there are several economic factor which has positive impact on individuals daily life as better economy of a country means people have a money in order to fulfill their needs. USA is a case in point where due to high GDP Americans living style is luxury as campared to other countries. In contrast, underdeveloped countries do not have adequate resources due to that many people are suffering from poverty which means that economy of nation impact their natives living style. In conclusion, although climate affects dwellers life in some cases, economy has more effect their way of life.
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is deemed
by a section of society that
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individuals
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life
is
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affected
by climate while others believe that
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economy
has a great
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impact
on their way of living.
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consider that
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economy
of a nation has more
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impact
on
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dwellers
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life
.
Nevertheless
, I shall shed light on both perspectives.

To commence with, the point of view of those
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people
who claim that climate
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impact
masses
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life
.
Firstly
, according to weather condition
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people
enjoy their
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life
as in
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cold
weather,
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people
prefer to stay at home and spend their quality of time with family members. Along with this, during
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pleasent
days, the majority of youngsters engage in outdoor activities such as cricket or basketball and
thus
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different
tasks are
being done
by individuals according to weather condition.
Moreover
, due to natural calamities
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people
are facing
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a lot of
difficulties such flood in
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gujrat
in 2007 which
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destroys
thousands of
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Gujaratis
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home and
they lost their families and
thus
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life
of masses if effected by climate.

However
,
on the other hand
, there are several economic
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factor
which has
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positive
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impact
on individuals daily
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life
as better
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economy
of a country means
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people
have
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a money
in order to fulfill their needs. USA is a case in point where due to high GDP Americans living style is luxury as
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campared
to other countries.
In contrast
, underdeveloped countries do not have adequate resources due to that
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many
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people
are suffering from poverty which means that
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economy
of nation
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impact
their natives living style.

In conclusion
, although climate affects dwellers
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life
in
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some
cases,
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economy
has more effect their way of
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life
.
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IELTS essay It is ongoing debate whether economy or climate has more impact on individuals daily life

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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