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These day more fathers stay at home and take care of their mothers go out to work.

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Nowadays a lot of men stay at home and bring up their children when woman are not at home. This essay argues that staying fathers at home has problematic consequences. The two most serious are the lack of money and rise family arguments. The last survey shows that many fathers do not work, and they take care of their children when their wives at work. It is enough to live which women earn. Besides that a woman is responsible for her children behavior, and they have kind heart. Women bring their children with a calmly. However, fathers bring up their children with a strict way. In this way children mostly sons bring in unusual way they afraid to show their talent ideas independently. On the other side. When family need some necessities there have been or risen some problematic issues. The recent survey claims that, 80 percent divorces and family arguments have risen because of the lack of money. As a family arguments effected negatively to bring up the children. They raise but they see the world with a negative fox, sight. It is not good for our society. The country cannot improve with such kind of people. They are only harmful for their relatives or communities. Taking everything into account staying at homes is not for men which has risen some problematic problems and lack of economical problems.
Nowadays
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men
stay at home and
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bring
up their
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children
when woman are not at home.

This essay argues that staying fathers at home has problematic consequences. The two most serious are the lack of money and rise
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family
arguments.

The last survey
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that
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fathers do not work, and they take care of their
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children
when their wives at work. It is
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enough
to
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live
which women earn.
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that a woman is responsible for her
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children
behavior, and they have kind heart. Women
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bring
their
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children
with a
calmly
.

However
, fathers
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bring
up their
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children
with a strict way. In this way
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children
mostly
sons
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bring
in unusual way
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they afraid
to
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show
their talent
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ideas
independently
. On the other side. When
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need
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necessities there have been or risen
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problematic issues. The recent survey claims that, 80 percent divorces and
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arguments have risen
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because
of the lack of money.

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As
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arguments effected
negatively
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bring
up the
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children
. They raise
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they
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the world with a
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fox, sight. It is not
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good
for our society. The country cannot
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improve
with such kind of
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people
. They are
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harmful for their relatives or communities.

Taking everything into account staying at homes is not for
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men
which has risen
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problematic problems and lack of
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economical
problems.

IELTS essay These day more fathers stay at home and take care of their mothers go out to work.

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
229 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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