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There should be laws to control the amount and type of violence shown on television program.

Some people believe that the violence shown on TV makes people commit all kind of felonies and plays a role in today`s increasing amount of crime in society. This essay strongly agrees that there should be laws restricting the amount of violence projected on tv-programs. The seen scenes of violent actions influence people in a way that makes them unconsciously okay with the cruel behavior, making them turn to any type of crime more easily and stimulates aggressive behavioral patterns. Firstly, programs broadcasting cruel actions in an open access have detrimental effect on the growing children. Any sort of violence seen by a child or young adult influence them negatively by providing a wrong example of conflict solving. Apart from that, cruel actions seen by the children imprint in their brains causing them to copy behaviour of offenders, misbihave and have frequent tantrums. The governments should impose ban on the programs showing unapropriate material to save the psychic of young minds. Furthermore, brutal types of content make any society more prone to crimes. There have been known many confessions of convicted claiming they got the ideas for their crimes from programs shown on TV. To attack the problem at the grass roots, there should be restrictions by law to deal with the aggressive material produced on television. I believe there must be no violence depicted on TV and instead, created more channels with high morality examples. To conclude, governments around the world should take into consideration the implementation of strict laws towards violence on TV. The limitations of the access to the savage behavior will aid in saving future grown law-abiding citizens` psychic intact and lower the crime rates.
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believe that the
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shown on TV
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makes
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people
commit all kind of felonies and plays a role in
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today`s
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in society. This essay
strongly
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that there should be laws restricting the amount of
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projected on
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tv-programs
. The
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seen
scenes of violent actions influence
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people
in a way that
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makes
them
unconsciously
okay with the cruel behavior, making them turn to any type of
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crime
more
easily
and stimulates aggressive behavioral patterns.

Firstly
, programs broadcasting cruel actions in an open access have detrimental effect on the growing children. Any sort of
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violence
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seen
by a child or young adult influence them
negatively
by providing a
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wrong
example of conflict solving. Apart from that, cruel actions
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seen
by the children imprint in their brains causing them to copy
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behaviour
of offenders,
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misbihave
and have frequent tantrums. The
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governments
should impose ban on the programs showing
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unapropriate
material to save the psychic of young minds.

Furthermore
, brutal types of content
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make
any society more prone to
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crimes
. There have
been known
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many
confessions of convicted claiming they
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got
the
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ideas
for their
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crimes
from programs shown on TV. To attack the problem at the
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grass roots
, there should be restrictions by law to deal with the aggressive material produced on television. I believe there
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must
be no
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violence
depicted on TV and
instead
, created more channels with high morality examples.

To conclude
,
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governments
around the world should take into consideration the implementation of strict laws towards
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violence
on TV. The limitations of the access to the savage behavior will aid in saving future grown law-abiding citizens` psychic intact and lower the
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crime
rates.

IELTS essay There should be laws to control the amount and type of violence shown on television program.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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