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There seems to be an increasing number of serious crimes committed each year. While some think the best way is to use the death penalty as deterrent, many people believe that other measures will be needed.

There seems to be an increasing number of serious crimes committed each year. While some think the best way is to use the death penalty as deterrent, many people believe that other measures will be needed. WXok
There is no doubt that the rate of crime has gone up in recent years which has forced some people to believe that capital punishment is the best solution to this, while others think the opposite. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument. A significant part of the population believes that death penalty is the best measure to solve the increasing crime in our society. This is simply because the stricter the punishment, the lower the probability of crime. For example, in the kingdom of Saudi Arabia, if you murder someone, you will be subjected to death penalty. Due to this, people living there usually think 100 times before committing a crime. This results in a crime free society which the country enjoys. On the other hand, many people believe that there are other possible methods to cut down crime. Instead of taking the lives of the convicts, we can give them smaller punishments and allow them to correct themselves. These little punishments can help to build a society which is fearless but is also morally and ethically strong. Alternately, capital punishment builds fear among the people even if they are innocent, they live in constant anxiety. Opting to lighter punishments gives people a second chance to fix themselves and remain part of the society along with other people. In conclusion, death penalty has many benefits such as it results in a crime free society, it also has drawbacks like it does not allow people to correct themselves.
There is no doubt that the rate of
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crime
has gone up in recent years which has forced
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some
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people
to believe that capital
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punishment
is the best solution to this, while others
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think
the opposite. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument.

A significant part of the population believes that death penalty is the best measure to solve the increasing
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crime
in our
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society
. This is
simply
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because
the stricter the
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punishment
, the lower the probability of
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crime
.
For example
, in the kingdom of Saudi Arabia, if you murder someone, you will
be subjected
to death penalty. Due to this,
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people
living there
usually
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think
100 times
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before
committing a
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crime
. This results in a
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crime
free
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society
which the country enjoys.

On the
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other
hand,
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many
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people
believe that there are
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other
possible methods to
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cut
down
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crime
.
Instead
of taking the
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lives
of the convicts, we can give them smaller
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punishments
and
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allow
them to correct themselves. These
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little
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punishments
can
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help
to build a
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society
which is fearless
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but
is
also
morally
and
ethically
strong.
Alternately
, capital
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punishment
builds fear among the
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people
even if they are innocent, they
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live
in constant anxiety. Opting to lighter
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punishments
gives
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people
a second chance to
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fix
themselves and remain part of the
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society
along with
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other
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people
.

In conclusion
, death penalty has
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many
benefits such as it results in a
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crime
free
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society
, it
also
has drawbacks like it does not
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allow
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people
to correct themselves.
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IELTS essay There seems to be an increasing number of serious crimes committed each year. While some think the best way is to use the death penalty as deterrent, many people believe that other measures will be needed.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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