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there is nothing bad in working while attending school.Do you agree or diagree?

there is nothing bad in working while attending school. Do you agree or diagree? pRbAD

Being an enthusiastic, a competent and a hard worker are some of the characteristic that can depicit a person who works while attending school. In my opinion, I find it extremely beneficial to be able to work and study at the same time. It definitely imposes a financial support, a working experience as weLl as social benefits. First of all, being able to attend school and work simultaneously, would contribute in supporting the individual financially. From a personal experience, I would say, it helped me a lot, I was able to insure an extra money in case of emergencies such as; paying for a doctor's visit as a result of a sudden illness as well as paying for many other unpredicted expenditures that had arose for any reason. Secondly, working while studying could also pave the way for the individual to cope with this challengeable world after graduation. People would be able to gain experience and not to be astounded with the real business world after done with their studying. Furthermore, some people would have an opportunity to guarantee a permenant job afterwards. Finally, working accompanied with studying could further expand the individual's social life. It could allow creating more relationships. Some of which could be even long lasting intimate ones. People could be able to find their soul mates, their best freinds as far as they can also meet so many other acquaintances whom they won't regret knowing. In conclusion, working while attending school could never be a bad thing. On the contrary, it could be tremendously advantageous from a financial aspect, from a social aspect. Besides it would promote a working experience.

Being an enthusiastic, a competent and a This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :arduous
hard
 worker are If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?some
some of the
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depicit
 a person who works while attending school. In my opinion, I find it extremely
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able
 to work and study at the same time. It definitely imposes a financial support, a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbusyengagedaliverunningemployedfunctioning
working
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtrainingmaturitypracticeunderstandingwisdompatience
experience
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 as social benefits.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".First
First of all
, being You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgoodadeptcapableaptcompetenteasy
able
 to attend school and work simultaneously
, would contribute in supporting the individual financially
. From a personal You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtrainingmaturitypracticeunderstandingwisdompatience
experience
, I would say, it This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assisted
helped
 me a lot, I was You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgoodadeptcapableaptcompetenteasy
able
 to insure Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply "extra money".extra money
an extra money
 in case of emergencies such as; paying for a doctor's visit as a result
 of a sudden illness as well
 as paying for This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
 other Possible spelling mistake found.predicted
unpredicted
 expenditures that had Use past participle here: "arisen".arisen
arose
 for any reason.

Secondly
, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbusyengagedaliverunningemployedfunctioning
working
 while studying could also
 pave the way for the individual to cope with this Possible spelling mistake found.challenge able
challengeable
 world after graduation. This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
People
 would be You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgoodadeptcapableaptcompetenteasy
able
 to gain You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtrainingmaturitypracticeunderstandingwisdompatience
experience
 and not to be astounded
 with the real business world after done with their studying. Furthermore
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 would have an opportunity to guarantee a Possible spelling mistake found.permanent
permenant
 job afterwards.

Finally
, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbusyengagedaliverunningemployedfunctioning
working
The usual collocation for "accompany" is "by," not "with." It is better to say this: "accompanied by".accompanied by
accompanied with
 studying could further
 expand the individual's social life. It could This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorize
allow
 creating more relationships. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
Some
 of which could be even This word is normally spelled with hyphen.long-lasting
long lasting
 intimate ones. This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
People
 could be You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgoodadeptcapableaptcompetenteasy
able
 to find their soul mates, their best Possible spelling mistake found.friendsbrandsreadsFranksfrancsfrauds
freinds
 as far as they can also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :attain
meet
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
 other acquaintances whom they won't regret knowing.

In conclusion
, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbusyengagedaliverunningemployedfunctioning
working
 while attending school could never be a This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :evil
bad
 thing. On the contrary
, it could be tremendously
 advantageous from a financial aspect, from a social aspect. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Besides,
Besides
 it would promote a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbusyengagedaliverunningemployedfunctioning
working
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtrainingmaturitypracticeunderstandingwisdompatience
experience
. 