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There is no shortage of debate whether the government should interfere in solving problems of people's daily life or not. I firmly believe that people cannot solve all their problems by their own or their family and assist of government is vital. I f v.1

There is no shortage of debate whether the government should interfere in solving problems of people's daily life or not. I firmly believe that people cannot solve all their problems by their own or their family and assist of government is vital. I f v. 1
Joblessness and the poverty have become a major issue in the developing countries. Many people argue that it is the government responsibility to care of the impoverished citizens. I completely agree with the statement, authorities should lend them a helping hand to make their lives better. First of fall, irrespective to the social status of the general public, they are citizens of a particular country. Therefore, they are entitled to receive every benefit from the state. It is the government’s duty to look after their people, if someone is unemployed, poor and homeless, authorities should provide them a shelter and give monetary benefits to lead a comfortable life. For example, many countries in western hemisphere provide minimum income support to their backward class to keep them out of dire poverty. I believe, every country should adapt this strategy for the benefit of their own population, else there will be a huge income inequality. Secondly, this policy reduces the poverty and increases the consumer spending. While providing the economic support, the jobless and the poor people must be trained with the skills that will be required to get a job. This strategy can show a positive ripple effect on the country’s GDP and standard of living. Some sections in the society criticize that free money makes people lazy. I believe, that opinion lies with the minority. For example, Scandinavian governments provide all the basic facilities to the under privileged sections by taxing the rich. As a result, their population enjoys the highest standard of living when compared to the rest of the world and their economies are considered to be most stable and developed. To conclude, I strongly that no citizen of a country should be in the dark without help. All the impoverished must have the same rights as the rest of the population.
Joblessness and the poverty have become a major issue in the developing
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countries
.
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Many
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people
argue that it is the
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government
responsibility to care of the impoverished citizens. I completely
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agree
with the statement, authorities should lend them a helping hand to
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make
their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
better.

First
of fall, irrespective to the social status of the
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general public
, they are citizens of a particular
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country
.
Therefore
, they
are entitled
to receive every benefit from the state. It is the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
’s duty to look after their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
, if someone
is unemployed
, poor and homeless, authorities should provide them a shelter and give monetary benefits to lead a comfortable life.
For example
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
in western hemisphere provide minimum income support to their backward
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
them out of dire poverty. I believe, every
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country
should adapt this strategy for the benefit of their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
population, else there will be a huge income inequality.

Secondly
, this policy
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduces
the poverty and increases the consumer spending. While providing the economic support, the jobless and the poor
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people
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must
be trained
with the
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skills
that will
be required
to
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get
a job. This strategy can
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show
a
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positive
ripple effect on the
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country’s
GDP and standard of living.
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Some
sections in the society criticize that free money
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
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people
lazy. I believe, that opinion lies with the minority.
For example
, Scandinavian
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governments
provide all the basic facilities to the under privileged sections by taxing the rich.
As a result
, their population enjoys the highest standard of living when compared to the rest of the world and their economies
are considered
to be most stable and developed.

To conclude
, I
strongly
that no citizen of a
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country
should be in the dark without
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
. All the impoverished
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must
have the same rights as the rest of the population.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay There is no shortage of debate whether the government should interfere in solving problems of people's daily life or not. I firmly believe that people cannot solve all their problems by their own or their family and assist of government is vital. I f v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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