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There is growing evidence that man-made activities are making global temperatures higher. What might be the man-made causes of temperatures rising? How should we deal with this problem?

Evidence about rising global temperatures is increasing in numbers rapidly. This essay will discuss the reasons for this alteration in terms of climate and provide two feasible remedies. Global warming is inexorably linked with car emissions and the dearth of recycling. In other words, vehicles are releasing large amounts of C02 to the atmosphere, and eventually, our globe is becoming increasingly warmer every day. Compared to the past, private vehicles are more widespread than public transport; consequently, more and more detrimental gases are being released and result in accelerating climate change. Moreover, people are not as well-educated as they should be about the vitality of recycling. To illustrate, a recent WWF study, which is conducted in 2018, indicates that only a quarter of the total amount of plastic on earth is recycling annually. In order to mitigate and quell this acceleration of rising temperatures, authorities should levy taxes on privately-owned vehicles, and educate people from an early age about the cruciality of recycling. As a consequence of imposing taxes on private cars, people will be disincentivized from owning these vehicles. Also, public transportation usage will become increasingly popular among citizens since it will become more cost-effective. Moreover, teaching every individual but especially to adolescents about the severity of recycling, bound to increase recycle bins' usage so that rising temperatures could decelerate. To conclude, privately-owned vehicles and a lack of attention to use recycling bins are the root-causes of global warming. So as to slow down this process, authorities not only ought to levy taxes on individually-owned vehicles but also most importantly have to educate the next generations, and other citizens about the importance of recycling.
Evidence about rising global temperatures is increasing in numbers
rapidly
. This essay will discuss the reasons for this alteration in terms of climate and provide two feasible remedies.

Global warming is
inexorably
linked with car emissions and the dearth of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
recycling
.
In other words
,
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vehicles
are releasing large amounts of C02 to the atmosphere, and
eventually
, our globe is becoming
increasingly
warmer every day. Compared to the past, private
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
vehicles
are more widespread than public transport;
consequently
, more and more detrimental gases are
being released
and result in accelerating climate
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change
.
Moreover
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are not
as well
-educated as they should be about the vitality of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
recycling
. To illustrate, a recent WWF study, which
is conducted
in 2018, indicates that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
a quarter of the total amount of plastic on earth is
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
recycling
annually
.

In order to mitigate and quell this acceleration of rising temperatures, authorities should levy taxes on
privately
-
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owned
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vehicles
, and educate
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people
from an early age about the
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cruciality
of
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recycling
. As a consequence of imposing taxes on private cars,
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people
will be
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disincentivized
from owning these
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vehicles
.
Also
, public transportation usage will become
increasingly
popular among citizens since it will become more cost-effective.
Moreover
, teaching every individual
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but
especially
to adolescents about the severity of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
recycling
, bound to increase recycle bins' usage
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so
that rising temperatures could decelerate.

To conclude
,
privately
-
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
owned
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
vehicles
and a lack of attention to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
recycling
bins are the root-causes of global warming.
‘So as to’ expresses purpose and is used in formal texts. Consider using “to”
So as to
slow down this process, authorities not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
ought to levy taxes on
individually
-
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
owned
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
vehicles
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
most
importantly
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
educate the
next
generations, and other citizens about the importance of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
recycling
.

IELTS essay There is growing evidence that man-made activities are making global temperatures higher. What might be the man-made causes of temperatures rising? How should we deal with this problem?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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