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Mothers play key roles in the upbringing of children.But in the recent times both parents are getting busy with proffesional life.Who in your opinion should take the responsibility of child care now

Mothers are very crucial for their children upbringing. Although, nowadays parents do not have free time for their children care because they are so busy with their jobs. I think mothers care one of the most useful method in child upbringing and I will discuss some reasons for this situation. First, in the past parents used to have more free time for their childen, but nowadays parents lost the habit of child caring, as they engaged in proffesional jobs. In the past mothers were set aside more time for their children and households, but men were more responsible for working outside for feeding their family and caring about them. Although this scenario changed over the past ten years. Secondly, parents do not have free time in terms of upbringing children in these days because of
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do not have free
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children
care
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mothers care one of the most useful
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in child upbringing and I will discuss
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reasons for this situation.

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parents
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for their
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nowadays
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lost the habit of child caring, as they engaged in
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proffesional
jobs. In the past mothers
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aside more
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time
for their
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children
and households,
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but
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men
were more responsible for working outside for feeding their family and caring about them.
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this scenario
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changed
over the past ten years.

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,
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parents
do not have free
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time
in terms of upbringing
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children
in these days
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IELTS essay Mothers play key roles in the upbringing of children. But in the recent times both parents are getting busy with proffesional life. Who in your opinion should take the responsibility of child care now

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
134 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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