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There is growing demand for fresh water nowadays and this is becoming a global problem. cause and solutions. v.1

There is growing demand for fresh water nowadays and this is becoming a global problem. cause and solutions. v. 1
It is a worrying trend that purifies drink has decreased significantly due to it has become a gigantic obstacle all over the world. The essay will highlight what are the reasons behind the happening and what are a few potential measures to resolve it. To embark with, there are multifarious aspects why the necessity of purify drink has been inclined. The primary reason is that, merely 2. 5% -2. 75% are clean H2O on the earth and in the contemporary era, it is being polluted because of industrial rubbish, usage of fuel fossils and drainage system. The amount of natural rain has decreased, which leads to need the natural H2O. The other massive cause is that masses are wasting a significant amount of H2O to wash the vehicles, clothes and others more. Owing to, the level of rain is declining day by day. These circumstances are causing a considerable amount of reducing pure drink from the earth. Turning towards solutions, some remedies can be adopted to improve the issue. The major remedy is that an administrator should be imposed laws to control the overuse of drink. For the purpose, the government can levy higher taxes on companies and individuals who are wasting too much water. To add more, higher authority should organise programs and seminars relevant to natural resources, which are necessary for surviving the masses. At the same time, an administrator should teach to the public that how can they mitigate the concern of clean sip and what are the reasons of acqu Occurring the problem. In conclusion, an essay highlighted that factors behind the happening are overuse and polluting of H2O. The essay presented that measures to that concern are two fold: implementing laws pertaining to clean drinking and encouraging people.
It is a worrying trend that purifies
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drink
has decreased
significantly
due to it has become a gigantic obstacle all over the world. The essay will highlight what are the reasons behind the happening and what are a few potential measures to resolve it.

To embark with, there are multifarious aspects why the necessity of purify
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drink
has
been inclined
. The primary reason is that,
merely
2. 5% -2. 75% are clean H2O on the earth and in the contemporary era, it is
being polluted
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of industrial rubbish, usage of fuel fossils and drainage system. The amount of natural rain has decreased, which leads to need the natural H2O. The other massive cause is that masses are wasting a significant amount of H2O to wash the vehicles, clothes
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
and others
more. Owing to, the level of rain is declining day by day. These circumstances are causing a considerable amount of reducing pure
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drink
from the earth.

Turning towards solutions,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
remedies can
be adopted
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the issue. The major remedy is that an administrator should
be imposed
laws to control the overuse of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drink
. For the purpose, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
can levy higher taxes on
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
and individuals who are wasting too much water. To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
add
more, higher authority should
Possible spelling mistake. 'organise' is British English.
organise
programs and seminars relevant to natural resources, which are necessary for surviving the masses. At the same time, an administrator should teach to the public that how can they mitigate the concern of clean sip and what are the reasons of
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acqu


Occurring the problem.

In conclusion
, an essay highlighted that factors behind the happening are overuse and polluting of H2O. The essay presented that measures to that concern are
The adjective or adverb 'twofold' needs to be written as one word.
two fold
: implementing laws pertaining to clean drinking and encouraging
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay There is growing demand for fresh water nowadays and this is becoming a global problem. cause and solutions. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
293 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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