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Fresh water has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem. What are the causes of the increased demand and what measure could governments and individuals take to respond to this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words. v.7

Fresh water has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem. What are the causes of the increased demand and what measure could governments and individuals take to respond to this problem? v. 7
Ever since the dawn of mankind, in many drier regions throughout the world, fresh water had been considered to be a valuable natural resource due to it being rather rare. This scarcity of water had contributed to a wide range of long-term problems that was yet to be solved. With the ongoing rise of human population, the problems were exacerbated even more compared to past generations. Irrespective of human attempts to alleviate the increasing demands and overuse of water, there has been no successful outcomes. Reasons for the failures stemmed mainly from the industry. The fourth Industrial Evolution has seen fast-paced changes in various fields, including technology. In order to fulfil the changes, human beings have to take a huge amount of resources from nature, whereby water is the main target. Together with the increasing population density, the water in the aforementioned problems is worsened further. The shortage of fresh water can be clearly exemplified in Africa, where enormous people cannot get access to clean water. To take one step further in solving this urgent issue, international authorities and individuals should take precautions against the use of water. The governments should enforce a law to regulate the amount of water that each resident use every day. Were there to be situations in which people do not comply with the law, punishments ought to be used to ensure that everyone obey the law. Moreover, infrastructures that primarily served to purify seawater into domestic water should be constructed to meet the standard requirements of clean water. Nevertheless, the problem cannot be solved easily without the aid of everyone around the world. Each individual should be aware of the catastrophic impact that the disappearance of water could bring so as to bring the lack to an end. In conclusion, the increasing needs for water is undoubtedly an emergent problem that was caused by many means. All people around the world, regardless of races, should take part in tackling the problem.
Ever since the dawn of mankind, in
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many
drier regions throughout the world, fresh
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water
had
been considered
to be a valuable natural resource due to it being
rather
rare. This scarcity of
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water
had contributed to a wide range of long-term
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problems
that was
yet
to
be solved
. With the ongoing rise of human population, the
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problems
were exacerbated
even more compared to past generations.

Irrespective of human attempts to alleviate the increasing demands and overuse of
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water
, there has been no successful outcomes. Reasons for the failures stemmed
mainly
from the industry. The fourth Industrial Evolution has
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seen
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fast
-paced
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changes
in various fields, including technology. In order to fulfil the
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changes
, human beings
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have to
take a huge amount of resources from nature, whereby
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water
is the main target. Together with the increasing population density, the
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water
in the aforementioned
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problems
is worsened
further
. The shortage of fresh
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water
can be
clearly
exemplified in Africa, where enormous
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people
cannot
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get
access to clean water.

To take one step
further
in solving this urgent issue, international authorities and individuals should take precautions against the
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use
of
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water
. The
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governments
should enforce a law to regulate the amount of
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water
that each resident
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use
every day. Were there to be situations in which
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people
do not comply with the law, punishments ought to be
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used
to ensure that everyone obey the law.
Moreover
, infrastructures that
primarily
served to purify seawater into domestic
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water
should
be constructed
to
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meet
the standard requirements of clean
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water
.
Nevertheless
, the
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problem
cannot
be solved
easily
without the aid of everyone around the world. Each individual should be aware of the catastrophic impact that the disappearance of
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water
could bring
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so as to
bring the lack to an
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end
.

In conclusion
, the increasing needs for
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water
is
undoubtedly
an emergent
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problem
that
was caused
by
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many
means. All
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people
around the world, regardless of races, should
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take part
in tackling the
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problem
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Fresh water has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem. What are the causes of the increased demand and what measure could governments and individuals take to respond to this problem? v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
327 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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