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There have been lots of debates about animal rights in different societies over last decade and sometimes we watch or hear from media that a group of people are protesting in each corner of the world to protect animal rights.

There have been lots of debates about animal rights in different societies over last decade and sometimes we watch or hear from media that a group of people are protesting in each corner of the world to protect animal rights. yRp9V
There have been lots of debates about animal rights in different societies over last decade and sometimes we watch or hear from media that a group of people are protesting in each corner of the world to protect animal rights. However, this group believes that animals should not be endangered by humans, while some others point that human needs are more important and people should be allowed to use animals for their different purposes. Therefore, this essay has tried to cover both of mentioned views and would suggest a good way to solve the issue. According to most of the history documents, the human has employed animals to have a better life from the time that civilisation has come to existence. In fact, the skin of animals has been considered as the first material for clothing industry and human has used the meat of them as a delicious food. These days, people spend money for these purposes and in addition scientists conduct most of their biology experiments on animals to find cures for illnesses. Some people worry about the mentioned trend as many animals’ species have been extinct because of exploiting them by the human. Actually, they believe that the God has created animals to live and human shouldn’t kill them or destroys their life places for his needs. So, if no step is taken for this situation, our planet has no place for animals and we just can see animals in zoos which will be another way of employing animals by the human. By contrast, some other argues that the God has created animals for human better life and it is inevitable that people use animals for their targets. In other words, it is such a life law that always the stronger kill the weaker for continuing the life and in the forest, wild animals kill other for food as human do it for his purposes. Therefore, human should exploit animals for food, clothes and to develop the science and no other way can be taken. I think, therefore, this occasion is such a sophisticated issue and both of views are concerning one aspect of human and animal rights. But perhaps, the realistic solution is balancing human behaviour about animals. Put another way, human should try to replace other ways instead of exploiting animals, however; it is not possible to eliminate the role of employing animals in human life.
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needs are more
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has employed
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animals
to have a better
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life
from the time that
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civilisation
has
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come
to existence. In fact, the skin of
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as the
first
material for clothing industry and
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human
has
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used
the meat of them as a delicious food. These days,
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people
spend money for these purposes and
in addition
scientists conduct most of their biology experiments on
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animals
to find cures for illnesses.

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people
worry about the mentioned trend as
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many
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animals’
species have been extinct
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because
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human
. Actually, they believe that the God has created
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animals
to
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live
and
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shouldn’t kill them or
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places for his needs.
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in zoos which will be another way of employing
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by the human.

By contrast,
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argues that the God has created
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better
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and it is inevitable that
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people
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use
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animals
for their targets. In
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other
words, it is such a
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life
law that always the stronger kill the weaker for continuing the
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life
and in the forest, wild
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animals
kill
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other
for food as
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do it for his purposes.
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,
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human
should exploit
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animals
for food, clothes and to develop the science and no
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way can
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But
perhaps, the realistic solution is balancing
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animals
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should try to replace
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,
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animals
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IELTS essay There have been lots of debates about animal rights in different societies over last decade and sometimes we watch or hear from media that a group of people are protesting in each corner of the world to protect animal rights.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
400 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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