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There has been an increase in the violent content shown on television series and movies lately. What do you think are the causes of this, and what solutions can be suggested to reduce the negative impacts of this trend?

There has been an increase in the violent content shown on television series and movies lately. What do you think are the causes of this, and what solutions can be suggested to reduce the negative impacts of this trend? pX6Ea
It is believed that more and more fierce screens are produced in films and episodes recently. This essay asserts the reasons behind it are that the movies are too easy to publish now and violent behaviors become more popular in the society. Our solutions to deal with these problems are to make strict rules for film publishing and set up more mental centers. Those violent contents of films result from the low conditions of movie publishing and the trend of rude social behaviors. Nowadays, anyone can make and publish a film, even though he is never trained about movie making. Therefore, more and more film works of low quality appear in public, especially those containing unsuitable shots. What's worse, due to the high living pressure, many people are not satisfied with their current lives, so they become rude and violent to their families, sometimes even strangers, which are recorded in the movies. A recent study of Harvard University shows that the amount of fighting phenomena in USA this year increases 20% from last year. The effective solutions to eliminate those negative influences are to make new severe principles of film publishing and offer more psychological help for necessary adults. It's high time that governments cope with the chaos in film making markets by letting serious regulations be the filter of some violent films, otherwise this problem will prosper forever. And if more mental centers are set up for those youths and adults who are in adverse situations, we can assist them in time rather than permit them behave violently in the society. Recently, an education system has built up several new courses for elders in China, which can solve the violent problems properly. In conclusion, our assertion is that the lack of limitations of film making and more and more violent behaviors are the reasons for fierce screens in movies and TV series. The useful solutions might be making strict rules about film making and more public attention on solving adults’ mental diseases.
It
is believed
that more and more fierce screens
are produced
in films and episodes recently. This essay asserts the reasons behind it are that the
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movies
are too easy to publish
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now
and
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violent
behaviors become more popular in the society. Our solutions to deal with these problems are to
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make
strict
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rules
for film publishing and set up more mental centers.

Those
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violent
contents of films result from the low conditions of
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movie
publishing and the trend of rude social behaviors. Nowadays, anyone can
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make
and publish a film,
even though
he is never trained about
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movie
making.
Therefore
, more and more film works of low quality appear in public,
especially
those containing unsuitable shots. What's worse, due to the high living pressure,
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many
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people
are not satisfied with their
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current
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lives
,
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so
they become rude and
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violent
to their families,
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sometimes
even strangers, which
are recorded
in the
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movies
. A recent study of Harvard University
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shows
that the amount of fighting phenomena
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in USA
this year increases 20% from last year.

The effective solutions to eliminate those
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negative
influences are to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
new severe principles of film publishing and offer more psychological
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
for necessary adults. It's high time that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
cope with the chaos in film making markets by letting serious regulations be the filter of
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some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
violent
films,
otherwise
this problem will prosper forever. And if more mental centers
are set
up for those youths and adults who are in adverse situations, we can assist them in time
rather
than permit them behave
violently
in the society. Recently, an education system has built up several new courses for elders in China, which can solve the
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violent
problems
properly
.

In conclusion
, our assertion is that the lack of limitations of film making and more and more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
violent
behaviors are the reasons for fierce screens in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
movies
and TV series. The useful solutions might be making strict
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
about film making and more public attention on solving adults’ mental diseases.
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IELTS essay There has been an increase in the violent content shown on television series and movies lately. What do you think are the causes of this, and what solutions can be suggested to reduce the negative impacts of this trend?

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333 words
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