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There are social, medical problems associated with the use of mobile phones. Mention some of the problems. Do the problems of mobile phones outweigh the benefits

Mobile phones plays an imperative role in everyone's life. There are some problems which occur such as technical, social and medical with the overuse of mobile phones. Personally, I corroborate that the usage of mobile phones is more advantageous it than its problems. Let us deliberate some compelling reasons which will lead towards a logical inference. To plunge into, there are plethora of reasons to shore light upon the issues. The most intrinsic one is that decreases face to face communication. In contemporary era mostly people give preference to mobile phones and they have decreased face to face communication and they have less time to spend with family members.
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problems which occur such as technical, social and medical with the overuse of mobile
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Personally
, I corroborate that the usage of mobile
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phones
is more advantageous it than its problems.
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compelling reasons which will lead towards a logical inference.

To plunge into, there are plethora of reasons to shore light upon the issues. The most intrinsic one is that decreases
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face
to
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face
communication. In contemporary era
mostly
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people
give preference to mobile
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phones and
they have decreased
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face
to
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face
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communication and
they have less time to spend with family members.
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IELTS essay There are social, medical problems associated with the use of mobile phones. Mention some of the problems. Do the problems of mobile phones outweigh the benefits

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
109 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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