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there are many motives for people to work. some people think money is most important

there are many motives for people to work. some people think money is most important 9lQjW

Money plays a very vital role in each and everyone's life and for making a pile we have to do work. Some folks have a perspective that money is the most essential. we will be discussing about this line in the further paragraphs and then will be coming to a conclusion. To initiate with, people work hard and the only motive behind their assiduous is the amount of the wealth they earn. I do believe that money can not buy us happiness despite of this, it is still very crucial for our living hood. For instance, father's only motive behind his hard-work is that to keep is family jubilant and to educate his children for that money is required. Furthermore, in my opinion there are myriad of reason to prove people should do work according to their interest because it will indirectly makes them feel satisfied. Earning a money with doing a work of our choice would be an astonished approach. If someone has an interest in the job he or she is doing then, they could definitely give their best in that particular job and this might helps them in future. For Instance, any individual working as a team member might become a manager soon if more interest and input is given. To conclude, I believe that money is essential but, making a pile while doing work of our own choice would be a more better option because it will make us feel contentment.

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very
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money
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discussing about this
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people
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work
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :arduous
hard
 and the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
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money
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buy
 us happiness Did you mean "despite" (or, alternatively, 'in spite of')?despite
despite of
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very
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only
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hard
-work is that to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :retain
keep
 is family jubilant and to educate his children for that You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsalarywagewealthpaybillcash
money
is required
.

Furthermore
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people
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work
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because
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The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: "make"make
makes
 them feel satisfied. Earning a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsalarywagewealthpaybillcash
money
 with doing a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtaskindustrytrialjobproductionstruggle
work
 of our choice would be an astonished approach. If someone has an interest in the job he or she is doing then, they could definitely give their best in that particular job and this might This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assists
helps
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in future
. For Instance
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soon
 if more interest and input is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accorded
given
.

To conclude
, I believe that You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsalarywagewealthpaybillcash
money
 is essential This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
, making a pile while doing You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtaskindustrytrialjobproductionstruggle
work
 of our This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :possess
own
 choice would be a Use only "better" (without 'more') when you use the comparative.better
more better
 option This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 it will This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 us feel contentment. 