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There are a number of skin-whitening products available in the market. State the reasons why people are using these products? Discuss the possible negative outcomes of using these products.

There are a number of skin-whitening products available in the market. State the reasons why people are using these products? Discuss the possible negative outcomes of using these products. 951kX
At present days there are several whitening products accessible in the store. In this essay we will further discuss what are reasons people prefer several beauty products and what are effects after utilizing this skin whitening creams. Firstly, people prefer whitening products to look beautiful. Many people are in perception that bright skin make them look beautiful than dark skin. With the increase of pollution, a lot of damage is happening to skin to overcome this most people prefer skin care products. Secondly, due to sun exposure skin faces plenty of problems, bunch of people are in false belief that fair skin boosts their confidence and tends to use more chemicals to be bright. For instance, to remove the tan which is caused due to sunlight people undergo lot of tan removal session. On the flip side, when skin undergoes through hard chemicals it results in damage of skin cells along with dreadful diseases like skin cancer besides, this powerful chemical causes many allergies. People use whitening products prescribed by doctors even this does not give permanent results once they stop consuming those products there are lot more problems arise. But, during this process there are losing naturality of the skin. For example, at present days people are undergoing through permanent whitening session through which they are losing their natural skin. To summarize the reason for choosing whitening products is the will of people to look beautiful and there are consequences for applying the products on regular basis can result in skin diseases.
At present days there are several
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whitening
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products
accessible in the store. In this essay we will
further
discuss what are reasons
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people
prefer several beauty
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products
and what are effects after utilizing this
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skin
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whitening
creams.

Firstly
,
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people
prefer
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whitening
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products
to look
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beautiful
.
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Many
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people
are in perception that bright
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skin
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make
them look
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beautiful
than dark
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skin
. With the increase of pollution,
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a lot of
damage is happening to
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skin
to overcome this most
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people
prefer
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skin
care
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products
.
Secondly
, due to sun exposure
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skin
faces
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plenty
of problems,
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bunch of
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people
are in false belief that
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fair
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skin
boosts their confidence and tends to
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use
more chemicals to be bright.
For instance
, to remove the tan which
is caused
due to sunlight
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people
undergo
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lot of
tan removal session.

On the flip side, when
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skin
undergoes through
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hard
chemicals it results in
The usual collocation for word "damage" is "to" not "of." Revise: "damage to".
damage of
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skin
cells along with dreadful diseases like
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skin
cancer
besides
, this powerful chemical causes
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many
allergies.
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People
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use
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whitening
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products
prescribed by doctors even this does not give permanent results once they
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stop
consuming those
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products
there are lot more problems arise.
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But
, during this process there are losing
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naturality
of the
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skin
.
For example
, at present days
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people
are undergoing through permanent
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whitening
session through which they are losing their natural skin.

To summarize
the reason for choosing
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whitening
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products
is the will of
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people
to look
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beautiful
and there are consequences for applying the
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products
on regular basis can result in
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skin
diseases.
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IELTS essay There are a number of skin-whitening products available in the market. State the reasons why people are using these products? Discuss the possible negative outcomes of using these products.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
6.0
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