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The world's most urgents problem is caused by over-population. Do you agree or disagree.

I am totaly agree with the belif that over-population is the most serious problem in todays era which is facing the world. In this easy I will tell you not only my view points but also give perspective of the people who don't agree with this trend. The primary reason for this belief is over use of natural resources. We all know that as the population increases the exploitation of all type of natural resources to fulfild their needs. Let's take a example of electricity as the people increase their demand of electricity will also raise to produce light, natural resources will be burn. Another reason to upload my views is that criminal activity will also increase. As their will be a rise in society people their will not job for every one on the planet to fulfill their need they will go on wrong track. A rearch shows that 20% robery where unemployed. On the other hand, there are individuals in the society who are of the outlook that thier are other problem with are more dangerous. One of the possible reasons for this belief is population can be controlled by strict law but if climate change is the biggest problem. Nowadays people using natural resources intensivly. The other reason might be extinction or natural fuels. To conclude, there surely are those in the society who seem to be convinced with the fact that overpopulation is not the biggest problems face by the us and they assumingly have all the right reasons to back their conviction. I, however, am of the firm opinion that in todays era overpopulation is the biggest problem because of the increase exploitation of natural resources and the increase of unlaw full activities.
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that over-population is the most serious
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era which is facing the world. In this easy I will
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people
who don't
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agree
with this trend.

The primary
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reason
for this belief is over
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use
of
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natural
resources. We all know that as the population
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increases
the exploitation of all type of
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natural
resources to
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fulfild
their needs.
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a
example of electricity as the
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people
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increase
their demand of electricity will
also
raise to produce light,
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natural
resources will be
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burn
.

Another
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reason
to upload my views is that criminal activity will
also
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increase
. As their will be a rise in society
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people
their will not job for every one on the planet to fulfill their need they will go on
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that 20%
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are other
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with are more
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. One of the possible
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reasons
for this belief is population can
be controlled
by strict law
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but
if climate
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change
is the biggest
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. Nowadays
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people
using
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natural
resources
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intensivly
. The other
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reason
might be extinction or
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natural
fuels.

To conclude
, there
surely
are those in the society who seem to
be convinced
with the fact that overpopulation is not the biggest
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problems
face by the
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us and
they
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assumingly
have all the right
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reasons
to

back their conviction. I,
however
, am of the firm opinion that in
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todays
era overpopulation is the biggest
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problem
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because
of the
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increase
exploitation of
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natural
resources and the
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increase
of
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unlaw
full activities.
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IELTS essay The world's most urgents problem is caused by over-population.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
288 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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