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The world s most urgent problem is caused by over population Do you agree or disagree

In bygone days, causes related population was negligible. However, nowadays over-population is major concern is today's world. While It has both negative and positive side, I firmly agree with that most of the problem cause by population in world. First and foremost, there are numerous factor related to this. Firstly, over-population need then own shelter which is not possible for everyone. We know that there are major part of earth covered by ocean water and remaining for land, where people already made their own shelter. As a result, people who not get the shelter. They make the own house at riverbank or at any high hill, especially those who can not afford money for buying house. Secondly, for living heathy life, people need food, cloths and shelter as prerequisites, which is not possible for everyone and for get to this people sometime take wrong step. For example, many people from low class family do crime for fulfil their family's requirements. Furthermore, nearly 30% people of world are there, who is illiterates and they do not have proper knowledge about hoe to live happy life. Moreover, they just follow their daily routine work like wake up at the morning, take breakfast with family and go for work and after returning take dinner and go to bad that's it. They do not want to change their mind for new advancement they do not tend to trend which is ongoing with world. A good illustration of this is, people who are famer and working as shopkeeper not have time that they spend quality time with their kith and kin. On the other hand, new generations kid have courage to do more and in developing countries, they need people who work as employer and help to develop country with their an intelligent knowledge. Moreover, people from 21st century have unmeasurable thought which help in improvement of causes related to growing world s problem. For example, educated people do deep research and make possible to measure distant from moon to earth it is totally done by the new youth who take interest on research. In conclusion, above both said point are relevant and valid. However, if I consider logically then I strongly agree with that world s major problem is caused by massive amount of population. It is suggested that, government should provide awareness about stop the population by taking some precaution.
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population
was negligible.
However
, nowadays over-population is major concern is
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and
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side, I
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with that most of the problem cause by
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in world.

First
and foremost, there are numerous
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related to this.
Firstly
, over-population need then
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own
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shelter
which is not possible for everyone. We know that there are major part of earth covered by ocean water and remaining for land, where
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people
already made their
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own
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shelter
.
As a result
,
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people
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who
not
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the
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shelter
. They
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at riverbank or at any high hill,
especially
those
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who
can not afford money for buying
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house
.
Secondly
, for living
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heathy
life,
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people
need food, cloths and
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shelter
as prerequisites, which is not possible for everyone and for
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get
to this
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people
sometime take
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wrong
step.
For example
,
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many
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people
from low
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class
family do crime for fulfil their family's requirements.

Furthermore
,
nearly
30%
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people
of
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world
are there,
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is
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illiterates and
they do not have proper knowledge about hoe to
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live
happy life.
Moreover
, they
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follow their daily routine work like wake up at the morning, take breakfast with family and go for work and after returning take dinner and go to
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bad
that's it. They do not want to
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change
their mind for new advancement they do not tend to trend which is ongoing with
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world
. A
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illustration of this is,
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people
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who
are
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famer
and working as shopkeeper not have time that they spend quality time with their kith and kin.

On the other hand
, new generations kid have courage to do more and in
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developing countries
, they need
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people
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who
work as employer and
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help
to develop country with their an intelligent knowledge.
Moreover
,
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people
from 21st century have
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unmeasurable
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thought
which
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help
in improvement of causes related to growing
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world
s problem.
For example
, educated
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people
do deep research and
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make
possible to measure distant from moon to earth it is
totally
done by the new youth
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who
take interest on research.

In conclusion
, above both said point are relevant and valid.
However
, if I consider
logically
then I
strongly
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agree
with that
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world
s major problem
is caused
by massive amount of
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population
. It
is suggested
that,
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government
should provide awareness about
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stop
the
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population
by taking
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some
precaution.
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IELTS essay The world s most urgent problem is caused by over population

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
397 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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