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Some people say that government should not put money on building theatres and sports stadium. They should spend money on medical care or education. Do you agree or disagree?

It is problematic issue that government should put money on medical care and education rather on building theatres and sports stadium. In my opinion all these things are important for people and government should allocate equal resources for both. Medical care is very important for the public health. If people are healthy, they work well which is good for the future of the country. In this country, many people are below poverty line which leads to many health issues so its a responsibility of government for their medical care. Old age people pay taxes during their work period, so its a responsibility of government for their medical care. Good education facility is another important key factor for government. In our country, many backward class and scheduled caste people didn't receive high education facilities as compare to middle class and rich families. Its a responsibility of government to give them equal treatment in education. Educated people are the future of our country. On the otherhand, theatres and sports stadium are equally important for people. Fun, art and entertainment is a part of life. Actors and sports person earn money and fame by showing their potential and abilities. Millions of people watch games on television, watch movies and read about them in newspaper. Therefore, we cannot say that these are unnecessary expenditures. In a nutshell, I pen down saying that all the things are important for people. All these things are basic necessities of life. Government should allocate equal resources for both.
It is problematic issue that
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should put money on medical care and
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rather
on building
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theatres
and sports stadium. In my opinion all these things are
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important
for
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people
and
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government
should allocate equal resources for both.

Medical care is
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important
for the public health. If
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people
are healthy, they work well which is
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good
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many
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people
are below poverty line which leads to
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health issues
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its
a responsibility of
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government
for their medical care.
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age
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people
pay taxes during their work period,
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so
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a responsibility of
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government
for their medical care.

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Good
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education
facility is another
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important
key factor for
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government
. In our country,
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backward
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class
and scheduled caste
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people
didn't receive high
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education
facilities as compare to middle
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class
and rich families.
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a responsibility of
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government
to give them equal treatment in
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education
. Educated
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people
are the future of our country.

On the
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otherhand
,
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theatres
and sports stadium are
equally
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important
for
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people
. Fun, art and entertainment is a part of life. Actors and sports person earn money and fame by showing their potential and abilities. Millions of
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people
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watch
games on television,
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watch
movies and read about them in newspaper.
Therefore
, we cannot say that these are unnecessary expenditures.

In a nutshell, I pen down saying that all the things are
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important
for
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people
. All these things are
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basic necessities
of life.
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Government
should allocate equal resources for both.
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IELTS essay Some people say that government should not put money on building theatres and sports stadium. They should spend money on medical care or education.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
250 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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