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The world is heavily dependent on oil for energy. Do you think a future resource will take oil’s place? Why do you think this?

The world is heavily dependent on oil for energy. Do you think a future resource will take oil’s place? Why do you think this? YLdjr
Most would agree that oil will not remain the world’s principal energy source indefinitely. With major breakthroughs in humanity’s ability to harvest power from the sun, I argue that solar power will one day become a cheaper and healthier alternative to petrol. This will be shown viable by looking at the falling price of solar energy per watt against the price of oil and the tremendous improvements to solar technology that have been made over the past few years. Firstly, the amount of energy produced by oil is almost equal to that produced by solar wafers. For example, a recent study published in Scientific America magazine predicted that the rising price of oil energy and the falling price of solar energy would meet in 2020. What this means is that from 2020 onwards, it would be more economical for a person to fuel their car using solar energy than it would using petrol. As economic forces are so fundamental to the day-to-day choices of the masses, it is clear that solar energy will take the place of oil as humanity’s next major energy resource. In addition to this, as solar technology develops it is becoming a much more refined energy producer. For instance, traditional solar panels were large, square boards that had to be facing the sun directly to harvest energy. Today, solar collectors come in all shapes and can be contoured to fit a range of product designs, from the rounded exterior of a car to the back of an iPhone. Usage trends such as these are yet another reason why solar energy is fit to take over oil as the world’s top energy source. After looking at both its increasingly competitive price and versatility, it is clear that solar power will come to fulfil humanity’s energy needs in place of oil. For the sake of the world’s wellbeing, I hope this transfer happens soon.
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will not remain the world’s principal
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source
indefinitely
. With major breakthroughs in humanity’s ability to harvest power from the sun, I argue that
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solar
power will one day become a cheaper and healthier alternative to petrol. This will
be shown
viable by looking at the falling
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price
of
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solar
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energy
per watt against the
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price
of
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oil
and the tremendous improvements to
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solar
technology that have
been made
over the past few years.

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, the amount of
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energy
produced by
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oil
is almost equal to that produced by
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solar
wafers.
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price
of
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oil
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energy
and the falling
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of
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solar
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would
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in 2020. What this means is that from 2020 onwards, it would be more economical for a person to fuel their car using
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solar
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energy
than it would using petrol. As economic forces are
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fundamental to the day-to-day choices of the masses, it is
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that
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will take the place of
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oil
as humanity’s
next
major
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energy
resource.

In addition
to this, as
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solar
technology develops it is becoming a much more refined
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energy
producer.
For instance
, traditional
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panels were large, square boards that had to be facing the sun
directly
to harvest
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energy
.
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Today
,
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collectors
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in all shapes and can
be contoured
to fit a range of product designs, from the rounded exterior of a car to the back of an iPhone. Usage trends such as these are
yet
another reason why
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solar
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energy
is fit
to take over
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oil
as the world’s top
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energy
source.

After looking at both its
increasingly
competitive
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price
and versatility, it is
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clear
that
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power will
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come
to fulfil humanity’s
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energy
needs in place of
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oil
. For the sake of the world’s
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, I hope this transfer happens
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IELTS essay The world is heavily dependent on oil for energy. Do you think a future resource will take oil’s place? Why do you think this?

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316 words
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