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The well-being of a society is enhanced when many of its people question authority. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take.

The well-being of a society is enhanced when many of its people question authority. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. 56amm
Human must live in society and as a part of society the country must elect or appoint someone as the authority. And thus empowering the authority we also risk the wellbeing, if it is handled by a wrong person. The prompt suggests that wellbeing enhances when people question authority. I agree with the prompt for the below two reasons. First, the empowerment of authority leads to corruption, and questioning the authority reduces corruption and enhances wellbeing. When we consider a man controlling vast power and wealth, there is a high chance that he will think of making some corruption for their own benefit, coz humans are not above their greed. For Example- say the countries of third world, where people have almost no right to question the government are the most corrupted. Also there is lots of corruption in politics all over the world more than any other professions, because people have very low rate of questioning the authority in this field. So the above two examples give us clear pictures why it is necessary and how much it is necessary to question the authority to increase the development and reduce corruption. Second, by questioning the authority it also increases the responsibility of them and enhances awareness among the authority as well as to people. If people question someone about their work and responsibility, it is obvious that that person will do the work more carefully and accurately and if no question is asked for sure they will just ignore the responsibility or maybe get it done but not so accurately if they need to answer someone about their work. For Example- In a class where students and parents are more concern about the quality of the education they or their children are getting, this institute will have definitely a better result than other non-concern institutes. Because when the students or parents will raise question regularly about the quality of education, the teachers will be more careful and responsible in their work to get rid of from further question and thus ensure better education. It is clear from the above example why questioning authority increases the performance and quality of work. In conclusion, Although Confidentiality is necessary to make sure some quality in some field, there is no such secrete way that then makes a better quality of work than answering about the work quality to people or consumer. To make sure this people must question the authority that will surely make the performance better than not questioning.
Human
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must
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live
in society and as a part of society the country
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must
elect or appoint someone as the
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authority
. And
thus
empowering the
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authority
we
also
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risk
the
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wellbeing
, if it
is handled
by a
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wrong
person. The prompt suggests that
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wellbeing
enhances when
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people
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question
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authority
. I
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agree
with the prompt for the below two reasons.

First
, the empowerment of
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authority
leads to
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corruption
, and
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questioning
the
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authority
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reduces
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corruption
and enhances
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wellbeing
. When we consider a
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man
controlling vast power and wealth, there is a high chance that he will
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think
of making
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some
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corruption
for their
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own
benefit,
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coz
humans are not above their greed. For
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Example-
say the countries of third world, where
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people
have almost no right to
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question
the
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government
are the most corrupted.
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Also
there is lots of
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corruption
in politics all over the world more than any other professions,
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because
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people
have
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very
low rate of
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questioning
the
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authority
in this field.
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So
the above two
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examples
give us
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clear
pictures why it is necessary and how much it is necessary to
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question
the
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authority
to increase the development and
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reduce
corruption.

Second, by
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questioning
the
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authority
it
also
increases the responsibility of them and enhances awareness among the
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authority
as well
as to
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people
. If
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people
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question
someone about their
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work
and responsibility, it is obvious that that person will do the
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work
more
carefully
and
accurately
and if no
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question
is
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asked for
sure they will
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just
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ignore
the responsibility or maybe
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get
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but
not
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so
accurately
if they need to answer someone about their
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work
. For
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Example-
In a
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class
where students and parents are more concern about the
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quality
of the education they or their children are getting, this institute will have definitely a
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better
result than other non-concern institutes.
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Because
when the students or parents will raise
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question
regularly
about the
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quality
of education, the teachers will be more careful and responsible in their
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work
to
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get
rid of from
further
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question
and
thus
ensure
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better
education. It is
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clear
from the above
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example
why
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questioning
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authority
increases the performance and
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quality
of work.

In conclusion
, Although Confidentiality is necessary to
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make
sure
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some
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quality
in
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some
field, there is no such secrete way that then
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makes
a
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better
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quality
of
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work
than answering about the
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work
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quality
to
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people
or consumer. To
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make
sure this
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people
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must
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question
the
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authority
that will
surely
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make
the performance
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better
than not
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questioning
.
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IELTS essay The well-being of a society is enhanced when many of its people question authority. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take.

Essay
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4 paragraphs
418 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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