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The wealth of nation depends primarily on the level of education of its workforce. How far do you agree with your statement, and what other factors do you think might be involved?

The wealth of nation depends primarily on the level of education of its workforce. How far , and what other factors do you think might be involved? qapM5
Weather the education level of workforce attributes to the economy of any country, has been been hostile issue on which there is a considerable debate. However, I personally believe that the economy of any country majorly depends on the workforce's education level. To begin with, the understanding of any work is mainly depends on the ability and level of one's thinking, infact, the ability of thoughts and critical thinking is majors attributed to the standard of education. To support the dependency of nation's economy on learning level of employees, the point is, education strenghthens the level of understanding of any work and improves the managing skills of any given tasks. Furthermore, a educated employee can produce singificantly superior outcomes as compared to that of uneducated employee, who has less understanding of work that leads to inferior outcomes, because of no education about the subject. Ultimately, better outcome by the skilled and educated employees would lead to developement of any organisation, and therefore, it will butress the economy of any nation. Secondly, the different education level of employees can divide them to their particular job and they can perform well in that specific domain because of their educational training. For example, a person, who studied till primary school, contrarily, another person has a master degree with better skills and learnings. They will perform their duty based on their education level, and would generate the outcomes respectively. In both cases, they benefits any company which will boosts the country's economy at the end. However, there are several other factors also that may help in improving the nations wealth, such as, the government assistance to the marginalised sections of society and the reduction of prices of various items which are mostly used by the country's people. These benefits enable the public to invest, purchase, and sale which ulimately support in the development of nation's economy. In conlusion, the level of education of employees is mainly attributes to the development of any nation's economy, however, there are other factors also on which the wealth of country depends and, they cannot be overlooked.
Weather the
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education
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level
of workforce attributes to the
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economy
of any country, has
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been been
hostile issue on which there is a considerable debate.
However
, I
personally
believe that the
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economy
of any country
majorly
depends on the workforce's
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education
level.

To
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begin
with, the understanding of any work is
mainly
depends on the ability and
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level
of one's thinking,
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infact
, the ability of thoughts and critical thinking is majors attributed to the standard of
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education
. To support the dependency of nation's
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economy
on learning
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level
of
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employees
, the point is,
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education
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strenghthens
the
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level
of understanding of any work and
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improves
the managing
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skills
of any
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given
tasks.
Furthermore
,
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a
educated
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employee
can produce
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singificantly
superior
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outcomes
as compared to that of uneducated
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employee
, who has less understanding of work that leads to inferior
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outcomes
,
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because
of no
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education
about the subject.
Ultimately
, better
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outcome
by the skilled and educated
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employees
would lead to
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developement
of any
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organisation
, and
therefore
, it will
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butress
the
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economy
of any nation.

Secondly
, the
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different
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education
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level
of
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employees
can divide them to their particular
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job and
they can perform well in that specific domain
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because
of their educational training.
For example
, a person, who studied till primary school,
contrarily
, another person has a master degree with better
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skills
and learnings. They will perform their duty based on their
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education
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level
, and would generate the
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outcomes
respectively
. In both cases, they
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benefits
any
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company
which will boosts the country's
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economy
at the
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end
.

However
, there are several other factors
also
that may
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help
in improving the
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nations
wealth, such as, the
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government
assistance to the
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marginalised
sections of society and the reduction of prices of various items which are
mostly
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used
by the country's
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people
. These benefits enable the public to invest,
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purchase
, and sale which
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ulimately
support in the development of nation's economy.

In
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conlusion
, the
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level
of
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education
of
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employees
is
mainly
attributes to the development of any nation's
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economy
,
however
, there are other factors
also
on which the wealth of country depends and, they cannot
be overlooked
.
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IELTS essay The wealth of nation depends primarily on the level of education of its workforce. How far , and what other factors do you think might be involved?

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