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The way of the Happiness Journey

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Psychological aspects have always become a significant problem in the lives of individuals. Almost all of us have experienced its negative influence without fail. There is no doubt that, happiness with money can be thought as one of the most tragic failures in the life. Therefore, due to excessive expectation from the human beings, definition of happiness is quite hard to find. That is why, some people have tried to reach better condition of feeling thanks to personal development for many years. Majority of people demands happiness from the external factors with a lot of expectation in order to find its true meaning. To illustrate, it is not a coincidence that ones questioning about always good mood will find themselves in a bad position at the end of the day. While everyone’s dynamic is different than each other, the true definition of feeling good should not be asked with pushing way. Another example can be given as following, by the substantial effect of social media, community has been evolved way different than ever before. However, there are so many platforms such as Instagram, Pinterest, Facebook etc. causing some graphical interests on users. Because of the fact that, it is an (threatining) under threat condition on social environment in terms of desiring popular looks deliberately. Consequently, the happiness becomes an undefined term when it is asked with full of expectation. On the other hand, personal development had better be taken into account to achieve happiness. For example, according to outstanding quotes of successful philosophers such as Descartes, Goethe, Marcus Aurelius etc. who studied on the true meaning of life, they mostly focused on self-education when it comes to being happy in any condition. Interestingly enough, even though these experts have said everything in advance, humanity is still under threat since they are distracted by outside instead of (noun- educating) educate whose (the, their) soul. Furthermore, thanks to improving opportunities of self development, sources are more accessible rather than past so happiness is not that far away as it is thought. Hence, personal growth is one of the main reasons when a person asks happiness. In conclusion, statement of being happy is diffucult to be defined owing to a lot of expectation among people as well as they have to reach happiness with regard to increasing individual capacity. I have the impression that, whether achieving the constant happiness is out of reach or not, nothing is impossible in person.
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lives
of individuals. Almost all of us have experienced its
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negative
influence without fail. There is no doubt that,
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happiness
with money can be
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thought
as one of the most tragic failures in the life.
Therefore
, due to excessive expectation from the human beings, definition of
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happiness
is quite
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hard
to find.
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why,
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some
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people
have tried to reach better condition of feeling thanks to personal development for
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many
years.

Majority of
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people
demands
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happiness
from the external factors with
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a lot of
expectation in order to find its true meaning. To illustrate, it is not a coincidence that ones questioning about always
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good
mood will find themselves in a
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bad
position at the
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end
of the day. While everyone’s dynamic is
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different
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than
each other, the true definition of feeling
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good
should not
be asked
with pushing way. Another example can be
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given
as following, by the substantial effect of social media, community has
been evolved
way
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different
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than
ever
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before
.
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, there are
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so
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many
platforms such as Instagram, Pinterest, Facebook etc. causing
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some
graphical interests on users.
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an
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threatining
) under threat condition on social environment in terms of desiring popular looks
deliberately
.
Consequently
, the
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happiness
becomes an undefined term when it
is asked
with full of expectation.

On the other hand
, personal development had better
be taken
into account to achieve
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
happiness
.
For example
, according to outstanding quotes of successful philosophers such as Descartes, Goethe, Marcus Aurelius etc. who studied on the true meaning of life, they
mostly
focused on self-education when it
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comes
to being happy in any condition.
Interestingly
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enough
,
even though
these experts have said everything in advance, humanity is
still
under threat since they
are distracted
by outside
instead
of (noun- educating) educate whose (
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the,
their) soul.
Furthermore
, thanks to improving opportunities of self development, sources are more accessible
rather
than past
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so
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happiness
is not that far away as it is
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thought
.
Hence
, personal growth is one of the main reasons when a person asks happiness.

In conclusion
, statement of being happy is
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diffucult
to
be defined
owing to
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a lot of
expectation among
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people
as well
as they
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have to
reach
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
happiness
with regard to increasing individual capacity. I have the impression that, whether achieving the constant
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
happiness
is out of reach or not, nothing is impossible in person.
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IELTS essay The way of the Happiness Journey

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
407 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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