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The vertical bar garph depicts the proportion of various age group in Australian men and women who engaged in physical exercise regularly in 2010.

The vertical bar garph depicts the proportion of various age group in Australian men and women who engaged in physical exercise regularly in 2010. N3Wgb

It can be apparently seen that mainly males who aged 15-24 do more physical activities that account for 52. 8%, but till 35-44, ratio of this activism declined significantly (39. 5)%. With regard to females percentage the most active women were mature which corresponds 54. 3%. Moreover, young females were less active as compared to males adults. Likewise, it is worth to mention that the number of women and men who were grey hair was nearly the same with 46. 7% and 47. 1% respectively.

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 males who aged 15-24 do more physical activities that account for 52. 8%, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 till 35-44, ratio of this activism declined significantly
 (39. 5)%. With regard to females percentage the most active women were mature which corresponds 54. 3%. Moreover
, young females were less active as compared to males adults. Likewise
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men
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grey
 hair was nearly
 the same with 46. 7% and 47. 1% respectively
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