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The vehicle congestion is one of the major problems in the present world the effect of this problem is a great barrier for the development of a country of a country. Give your opinion and the solution in order to minimise this problem.

The vehicle congestion is one of the major problems in the present world the effect of this problem is a great barrier for the development of a country of a country. Give your opinion and the solution in order to minimise this problem. 668Qj
These days, we have been facing various of problems everyday. . One of the enormous problem is traffic congestion and it has been an barrier for plethora of work. Yet, this essay will discuss the problems and number of solution. Firstly, people have started to use their own vehicles rather than using the public transportation. There are number of reasons behind this although buses, trains are available people prefer to use the own vehicles since it is not comfortable and getting late to travel from one place to another place. Thereby private vehicles are increasing in the road as well as the traffic also increasing. Moreover, number of ways also still being repaired as result of that, traffic problems comes more and we are unable to bring proper solutions against this particular issue. Yet, I think people also must contribute to reduce this problem. Secondly, imposing heavy tax on private car owners can be super solutions. Because people would stop buying car, bikes etc. So it would make them use the public transportation otherwise they would use the cars but not frequently thereby vehicles congestion can be reduced automatically. On top of that, another solution to minimise this issue is making public vehicles totally comfortable, spacious and its also fast should be increased like importing fastest buses and trains as in Japan. Consequently, people would stop using own vehicles as a result problems may reduce gradually. Yet, i think government's role is throughly important here to develope and solve this. To sum up, when people stop using own vehicles traffic would be minimised. In addition, government also should bring new ways to stop this that is when these problems might not be a barrier for the developments.
These days, we have been facing various of
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problems
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everyday
.
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.
One of the enormous
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problem
is
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traffic
congestion and it has been
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an
barrier for plethora of work.
Yet
, this essay will discuss the
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problems
and number of solution.

Firstly
,
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people
have
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started
to
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use
their
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own
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vehicles
rather
than using the public transportation. There are number of reasons behind this although buses, trains are available
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people
prefer to
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use
the
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own
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vehicles
since it is not comfortable and getting late to travel from one place to another place. Thereby private
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vehicles
are increasing in the road
as well
as the
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traffic
also
increasing.
Moreover
, number of ways
also
still
being repaired
as result of that,
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traffic
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problems
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comes
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more and
we are unable to bring proper solutions against this particular issue.
Yet
, I
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people
also
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must
contribute to
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reduce
this problem.

Secondly
, imposing heavy tax on private car owners can be super solutions.
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Because
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people
would
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stop
buying car, bikes etc.
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it would
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make
them
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use
the public transportation
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the cars
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but
not
frequently
thereby
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vehicles
congestion can be
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reduced
automatically
.
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, another solution to
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minimise
this issue is making public
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vehicles
totally
comfortable, spacious and its
also
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fast
should
be increased
like importing
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fastest
buses and trains as in Japan.
Consequently
,
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people
would
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stop
using
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own
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vehicles
as a result
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problems
may
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reduce
gradually
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,
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i
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think
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government
's role is
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throughly
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important
here to
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develope
and solve this.

To sum up, when
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people
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stop
using
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own
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vehicles
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traffic
would be
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minimised
.
In addition
,
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government
also
should bring new ways to
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stop
this
that is
when these
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problems
might not be a barrier for the developments.
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IELTS essay The vehicle congestion is one of the major problems in the present world the effect of this problem is a great barrier for the development of a country of a country. Give your opinion and the solution in order to minimise this problem.

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