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The use of mobile phones

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Keep simple contact and easy more Mobile phones are a step forward in communication, but with basic cell phones, people can only transmit and receive simple messages with sound and text messages. Today with smartphones, whether at any time or anywhere, just a few taps you have a multitude of options to connect with loved ones, from video to conversation, send Message. image, chat time and animate on online chat,
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Mobile phones are a step forward in communication,
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with basic cell phones,
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transmit and receive simple messages with sound and text messages.
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with smartphones, whether at any time or anywhere,
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a few taps you have a multitude of options to connect with
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ones, from video to conversation,
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Message.
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, chat time and animate on online chat,

IELTS essay The use of mobile phones

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
70 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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