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How can old people be encouraged to use this new technology?

How can old people be encouraged to use this new technology? KwEAw
There are an arrays of measures that could be considered to convince the old to use new technologies on a more widely manner. The first method might be that the government could lend a helping hand by providing the old with subsidies, with people aged over 50 being able to purchase high-tech devices at discounted prices standing out as a compelling epitome. By following this pathway, the old would be motivated to purchase more state-of-the-art devices. Another suggestion worth mentioning is that young people in the family should care more about their ancestors by supplying them with sufficient instructions for using cutting edge devices or helping them to understand the tremendous merits of using them. By doing so, the old would be aware of the importance of technologies as well as how to access the universe of knowledge on the internet.
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an arrays
of measures that could
be considered
to convince the
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old
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
new technologies on a more
widely
manner. The
first
method might be that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
could lend a helping hand by providing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
old
with subsidies, with
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
aged over 50 being able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
high-tech devices at discounted prices standing out as a compelling epitome. By following this pathway, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
old
would
be motivated
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
more state-of-the-art devices. Another suggestion worth mentioning is that young
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
in the family should care more about their ancestors by supplying them with sufficient instructions for using cutting edge devices or helping them to understand the tremendous merits of using them. By doing
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so
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
old
would be aware of the importance of technologies
as well
as how to access the universe of knowledge on the internet.

IELTS essay How can old people be encouraged to use this new technology?

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
141 words
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4.0
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