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The usage of mobile phones in the majority of schools is banned.

The usage of mobile phones in the majority of schools is banned. While these devices may be useful for learning or connectivity with others, it is, however a wise decision to restrict their use within the campus. first of all, phones set to be a major source of distraction in the classrooms. As the students will lose focus due to the constant urge to check on their phones, for instant, responding to the notifications and reacting to some of them which will lead him to mentally stray and not paying attention to the teacher. The situation even worsens when the phones are not set on silent mood as, consequently this will negatively impact other students and the teacher as well. Therefore, mobiles must be not allowed to the classrooms. The second reason for phone banning is the abuse of it. Unfortunately, some students might misuse their devices and bring harm whether to their peers or even to themselves. For example, recording an inappropriate video of a student and uploading it to the social media platforms. This might have a serious impact on him and expose him to be either cyberbullied or bullied in the school. Thus, to avoid, or at least minimize such acts, it is healthy to prevent students from phones in the school. To conclude, despite the wide utilization of phones nowadays, it is restriction from being used in the schools serves to be a good development. This will enhance the learning process by cutting a major distraction source and prevent the students of misusing it within the campus.
The usage of mobile
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phones
in the majority of schools
is banned
. While these devices may be useful for learning or connectivity with others, it is,
however
a wise decision to restrict their
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use
within the campus.

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first
of all,
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phones
set to be a major source of distraction in the classrooms. As the
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students
will lose focus due to the constant urge to
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check
on their
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phones
, for instant, responding to the notifications and reacting to
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some
of them which will lead him to mentally stray and not paying attention to the teacher. The situation even worsens when the
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phones
are not set on silent mood as,
consequently
this will
negatively
impact other
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students
and the teacher
as well
.
Therefore
, mobiles
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must
be not
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allowed
to the classrooms.

The second reason for
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phone
banning is the abuse of it. Unfortunately,
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some
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students
might misuse their devices and bring harm whether to their peers or even to themselves.
For example
, recording an inappropriate video of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
and uploading it to the social media platforms. This might have a serious impact on him and expose him to be either cyberbullied or bullied in the school.
Thus
, to avoid, or at least minimize such acts, it is healthy to
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prevent
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students
from
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phones
in the school.

To conclude
, despite the wide utilization of
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phones
nowadays, it is restriction from being
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
in the schools serves to be a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
development. This will enhance the learning process by cutting a major distraction source and
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prevent
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
of misusing it within the campus.
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IELTS essay The usage of mobile phones in the majority of schools is banned.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
6.5
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