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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.7

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
The two drawings describe the changes in the same island before and after the construction of some transport and service buildings for tourism. Generally, comparing the two maps, there are significant changes after development. These development make the whole island more crowded which modern facilities. Besides, the sea is also utilized for activities. It can be seen that before development, the horizontal island which is approximately 260 meters has a few trees on both the east and west sides. In addition, we can see a huge space without service buildings in the middle of the island. Furthermore, on the west edge, a small beach is located for tourism. However, moving to the second map, the west trees are surrounded by some accommodation houses, with a footpath linked to the beach where a swimming zone is closely connected. Next to the western accommodation, a reception building is rounded by a vehicle track road heading to the south pier. At the north of the reception, a restaurant stands near the sea. Finally, the centre of the island is also designed to service buildings for tourists.
The two drawings
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changes
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island
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before
and after the construction of
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some
transport and service
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buildings
for tourism.

Generally
, comparing the two maps, there are significant
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changes
after development.
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These development
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make
the whole
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island
more crowded which modern facilities.
Besides
, the sea is
also
utilized for activities.

It can be
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seen
that
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before
development, the horizontal
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island
which is approximately 260 meters has a few trees on both the east and west sides.
In addition
, we can
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see
a huge space without service
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buildings
in the middle of the
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island
.
Furthermore
, on the west edge, a
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small
beach
is located
for tourism.

However
, moving to the second map, the west trees
are surrounded
by
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some
accommodation
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houses
, with a footpath linked to the beach where a swimming zone is
closely
connected.
Next
to the western accommodation, a reception
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building
is rounded
by a vehicle
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track
road heading to the south pier. At the north of the reception, a restaurant stands near the sea.
Finally
, the
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centre
of the
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island
is
also
designed to service
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buildings
for tourists.
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IELTS essay The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
183 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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