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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.8

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
The two maps illustrate the differences of an island after the installation of tourist infrastructure. Overall, there were a significant number of facilities have been constructed in the island. However, the natural resources and landscape of the island is still well preserve. Before the construction, it is clearly that there were only trees, a beach and most parts of the island were empty. As is observe form the map, after the construction, many facilities have been built including a reception, a restaurant and many accommodations for tourists. In addition, a pier was also constructed and the beach is utilize for the swimming purpose. There are two types of track to connect these facilities. First type is the vehicle track which begin at the pier then go circle around the reception and end at restaurant. Besides that, there are various short footpaths which lead to each tourist' s house as well as the beach.
The two maps illustrate the differences of an
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island
after the installation of tourist infrastructure.

Overall
, there were a significant number of facilities have
been constructed
in the
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island
.
However
, the natural resources and landscape of the
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island
is
still
well preserve.

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Before
the construction, it is
clearly
that there were
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only
trees, a beach and most parts of the
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island
were empty. As is
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observe
form the map, after the construction,
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many
facilities have
been built
including a reception, a restaurant and
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many
accommodations for tourists.
In addition
, a pier was
also
constructed and the beach is
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utilize
for the swimming purpose. There are two types of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
track
to connect these facilities.
First
type is the vehicle
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track
which
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begin
at the pier then go circle around the reception and
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end
at restaurant.
Besides
that, there are various short footpaths which lead to each
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house
as well
as the beach.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
153 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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