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the topic is writing task 1

the topic is writing task 1 NMYpb
1. In 2015, the number of cars in Hanoi was a significant increase, accounting for 20% of the total number of personal vehicles in this city. 2. There was a rise in the number of cars used between 2015 and 2020. More specifically, the former constituted only 2000 while the latter accounted for 5000. 3. -There was a growth of 3000 in car uses in Hanoi, from 1000 to 4000, between 2015 and 2020. Hoặc -Hanoi city had an enormous climb the number of cars between 2015 to 2020. It went up by 3000 from 1000 to 4000. 4. -The number of cars experienced a spectacular rise in Hanoi, which climbed to a new peak of 10, 000 in the year 2020. -The figures for cars peaked level in 2020, at 10, 000. 5. In 2015, The car sales saw a significant growth with 20, 000 of car saled. However, this number doubled/tripled in 2018. 6. -In 2013, the number of cars consumed reached 30, 000, whereas in 2015 went into free fall, which decreased to approximately 20, 000. Hoặc -Car sales in 2015 fell compared by 10, 000 to 2013 (from 20, 000 to 30, 000)
1. In 2015, the
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number
of
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cars
in Hanoi was a significant increase, accounting for 20% of the total
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number
of personal vehicles in this city.

2. There was a rise in the
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number
of
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cars
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used
between 2015 and 2020. More
specifically
, the former constituted
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only
2000 while the latter accounted for 5000.

3. -There was a growth of 3000 in
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car
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uses
in Hanoi, from 1000 to 4000, between 2015 and 2020.

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-Hanoi city had an enormous climb the
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of
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cars
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between 2015 to 2020
. It went up by 3000 from 1000 to 4000.

4. -The
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of
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cars
experienced a spectacular rise in Hanoi, which climbed to a new peak of 10, 000 in the year 2020.

-The figures for
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cars
peaked level in 2020, at 10, 000.

5. In 2015, The
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car
sales
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saw
a significant growth with 20, 000 of
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car
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saled
.
However
, this
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number
doubled/tripled in 2018.

6. -In 2013, the
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of
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cars
consumed reached 30, 000, whereas in 2015 went into free fall, which decreased to approximately 20, 000.

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-Car sales in 2015 fell compared by 10, 000 to 2013 (from 20, 000 to 30, 000)
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IELTS essay the topic is writing task 1

Essay
  American English
9 paragraphs
196 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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