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The table illustrates how much money donated to support technology, by the US, EU, and other countries charities, in billions of US dollars between 2006 and 2010. v.2

The table illustrates how much money donated to support technology, by the US, EU, and other countries charities, in billions of US dollars between 2006 and 2010. v. 2
The table illustrates how much money donated to support technology, by the US, EU, and other countries charities, in billions of US dollars between 2006 and 2010. Overall, total aid increased rapidly in 5 years, and the US charities gave most of the money for donations. From 2006 to 2010, the number of total aid rose significantly from $15, 7 billion to $30 billion, raising $14, 3 billion in the periods. During this time, US charities contribute grew steadily from $9. 7 billion to reach a peak of $22. 7 billion. Besides, the donation of remain charities also increased in the whole time. In EU countries, there was a slowly grow in money aid each year from $3. 3 billion (2006) to $3. 8 billion (2008), followed by a slight fall in next year, before reaching to $4. 0 billion in 2010. Moreover, contribution in other countries also rose although this figure had similar fluctuation as the number of EU charities in the amount of money given each year. Their donation went up from $2. 7 billion to $3. 3 billion at the end of the period.
The table illustrates how much
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money
donated to support technology, by the US, EU, and other countries
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charities
, in
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billions
of US dollars between 2006 and 2010.

Overall
, total aid increased
rapidly
in 5 years, and the US
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charities
gave most of the
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money
for donations.

From 2006 to 2010, the number of total aid rose
significantly
from $15, 7
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billion
to $30
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billion
, raising $14, 3
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billion
in the periods. During this time, US
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charities
contribute grew
steadily
from $9. 7
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billion
to reach a peak of $22. 7
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billion
.
Besides
, the donation of remain
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charities
also
increased in the whole time.

In EU countries, there was a
slowly
grow in
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money
aid each
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year
from $3. 3
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billion
(2006) to $3. 8
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billion
(2008), followed by a slight fall in
next
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year
,
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before
reaching to $4. 0
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billion
in 2010.
Moreover
, contribution in other countries
also
rose although this figure had similar fluctuation as the number of EU
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charities
in the amount of
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money
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given
each
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year
. Their donation went up from $2. 7
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billion
to $3. 3
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billion
at the
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end
of the period.
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23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The table illustrates how much money donated to support technology, by the US, EU, and other countries charities, in billions of US dollars between 2006 and 2010. v. 2

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4 paragraphs
187 words
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