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The table gives information about the amount of income people who spend on 4 daily things in the UK in 1998

The table gives information about the amount of income people who spend on 4 daily things in the UK in 1998 2RJdw
Overall, There have been eye-catching changes in the promortion of income adults and women. Their purchase with these given items are so different in compared with each other in that year. The proportion of income adults was a quarter percentage for food but electronic equipment and music's amounts were the same ( only 5%) but women spend on a bit of more than adults for the first item so their number was 39% and this was the most amount for food in this table but for videos they were differ from each other only 1 % ( clearly adults were 1% and women were 2%) Despite the fact that men tend to eat more the proportion of their was less than a fifth in 1998. However, they prefered to buy electronic equipments so its number was one in ten. During that year the amount of teenagers and kids' incomes spend on music were about 40%. Also, for videos the numbers were more espicially than adults ( around 15%)
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of income
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adults
and women. Their
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purchase
with these
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given
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so
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different
in compared with each other in that year. The proportion of income
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adults
was a quarter percentage for food
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but
electronic equipment and music's amounts were the same
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(
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only
5%)
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women spend on a bit of more than
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adults
for the
first
item
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so
their number was 39% and this was the most amount for food in this table
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but
for videos they were
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differ
from each other
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only
1 %
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(
clearly
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adults
were 1% and women were 2%) Despite the fact that
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men
tend to eat more the proportion of
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their
was less than a fifth in 1998.
However
, they
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prefered
to
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buy
electronic equipments
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so
its number was one in ten. During that year the amount of
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teenagers
and kids' incomes spend on music were about 40%.
Also
, for videos the numbers were more
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espicially
than
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adults
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(
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IELTS essay The table gives information about the amount of income people who spend on 4 daily things in the UK in 1998

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