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The table below shows the projected costings over the next five years in American dollars for three environmental projects sustainable forestry. The pie chart shows the expected expenditure breakdown allocation for the first years as the projects are set v.1

The table below shows the projected costings over the next five years in American dollars for three environmental projects sustainable forestry. The pie chart shows the expected expenditure breakdown allocation for the first years as the projects are set v. 1
It is argued that tourists from overseas should be charged more than local residents to visit important sites and monuments. I completely disagree with this idea. The argument in favour of higher prices for foreign tourists would be that cultural or historical attractions often depend on state subsidies to keep them going, which means that the resident population already pays money to these sites through the tax system. However, I believe this to be a very shortsighted view. Foreign tourists contribute to the economy of the host rustic with the money they spend on a wide range of goods and services, including food, souvenirs, accommodation and travel. The governments and inhabitants of every agrarian should be happy to subsidise important tourist sites and encourage people from the rest of the world to visit them. If travellers realised that they would have to pay more to visit historical and cultural attractions in a particular nation, they would perhaps decide not to go to that homey on holiday. To take the UK as an example, the tourism industry and many related jobs rely on visitors coming to the agrarian to see places like Windsor Castle or Saint Paul’s Cathedral. These two sites charge the same price regardless of nationality, and this helps to promote the nation’s cultural heritage. If overseas tourists stopped coming due to higher prices, there would be a risk of insufficient funding for the maintenance of these important buildings. In conclusion, I believe that every effort should be made to attract tourists from overseas, and it would be counterproductive to make them pay more than local residents.
It
is argued
that
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tourists
from overseas should
be charged
more than local residents to visit
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important
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sites
and monuments. I completely disagree with this
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idea
.

The argument in
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favour
of higher prices for foreign
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tourists
would be that cultural or historical attractions
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often
depend on state subsidies to
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keep
them going, which means that the resident population already pays money to these
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sites
through the tax system.
However
, I believe this to be a
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very
shortsighted view. Foreign
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tourists
contribute to the economy of the host rustic with the money they spend on a wide range of
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goods
and services, including food, souvenirs, accommodation and travel. The
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governments
and inhabitants of every agrarian should be happy to
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subsidise
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important
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tourist
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sites
and encourage
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people
from the rest of the world to visit them.

If
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travellers
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realised
that they would
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have to
pay more to visit historical and cultural attractions in a particular nation, they would perhaps decide not to go to that homey on holiday. To take the UK as an example, the tourism industry and
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many
related jobs rely on visitors coming to the agrarian to
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see
places like Windsor Castle or Saint Paul’s Cathedral. These two
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sites
charge the same price regardless of nationality, and this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
to promote the nation’s cultural heritage. If overseas
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tourists
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stopped
coming due to higher prices, there would be a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
of insufficient funding for the maintenance of these
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important
buildings.

In conclusion
, I believe that every effort should
be made
to attract
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourists
from overseas, and it would be counterproductive to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
them pay more than local residents.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The table below shows the projected costings over the next five years in American dollars for three environmental projects sustainable forestry. The pie chart shows the expected expenditure breakdown allocation for the first years as the projects are set v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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