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The table below shows the figures for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980. v.1

The table below shows the figures for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980. v. 1
It is an indisputable truth that food habits play a pivotal role in health matters. Some believe that consuming food products of local farmers are beneficial to people rather than preferring foods which are produced by factories. This viewpoint finds favour with me. Although manufactory farming products would be cost-efficient, traditional farming has many benefits associated with it. To embark on, there are two prominent reasons why factory farming is advantageous. Firstly, goods of factory farming are low-priced. With the technological sophistication and advanced science, agriculture can produce many products within a minimum duration; therefore, it provides affordability in price to the general populace. For example, according to the survey taken by the Indian Food Corporation, the Agri-food sector has increased 30% in production than previous projections taken last year, which reduced the price substantially. Besides, factories have a robust security inspection system for products which elevates the credibility of the goods among masses. However, quality can be ensured in the traditional way of farming by local farmers. It is irrefutably true that numerous chemicals like pesticides and herbicides have been incorporated into farming methodologies; as a result, people are prone to be affected by detrimental health issues. To exemplify, it is witnessed that, a few decades ago, people were physically robust because of the food quality, but, now, nutrients have been neglected by hybrid products. Moreover, evidently, goods of local farmers can be purchased immaculately, whereas goods transported from a far distance would not be pristine. Thus, these factors should be taken into account. In conclusion, while the trend of eating local food has become exponentially popular, factory farming also has its own merits.
It is an indisputable truth that
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food
habits play a pivotal role in health matters.
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Some
believe that consuming
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food
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products
of
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local
farmers are beneficial to
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people
rather
than preferring
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foods
which
are produced
by
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factories
. This viewpoint finds
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favour
with me. Although
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manufactory
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farming
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products
would
be cost
-efficient, traditional
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farming
has
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many
benefits associated with it.

To embark on, there are two prominent reasons why
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factory
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farming
is advantageous.
Firstly
,
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goods
of
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factory
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farming
are low-priced. With the technological sophistication and advanced science, agriculture can produce
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many
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products
within a minimum duration;
therefore
, it provides affordability in price to the general populace.
For example
, according to the survey taken by the Indian
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Food
Corporation, the
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Agri-food
sector has increased 30% in production than previous projections taken last year, which
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reduced
the price
substantially
.
Besides
,
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factories
have a robust security inspection system for
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products
which elevates the credibility of the
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goods
among masses.

However
, quality can
be ensured
in the traditional way of
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farming
by
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local
farmers. It is
irrefutably
true that numerous chemicals like pesticides and herbicides have
been incorporated
into
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farming
methodologies;
as a result
,
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people
are prone to be
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affected
by detrimental health issues. To exemplify, it
is witnessed
that, a few decades ago,
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people
were
physically
robust
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because
of the
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food
quality,
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but
,
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now
, nutrients have
been neglected
by hybrid
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products
.
Moreover
,
evidently
,
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goods
of
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local
farmers can be
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purchased
immaculately
, whereas
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goods
transported from a far distance would not be pristine.
Thus
, these factors should
be taken
into account.

In conclusion
, while the trend of eating
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local
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food
has become
exponentially
popular,
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factory
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farming
also
has its
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own
merits.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The table below shows the figures for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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