There is no doubt that the society will become much better if young volunteers are participating in helping other people or the environment. However, despite many agree with doing so, I do not believe that teenagers should assist the society for free.
Firstly, if the number of younger does almost the same jobs as companies' employees, there is no point allowing them to do so without getting paid. Even though they are still young and do no have as much experience as professionals, it does not mean people can take advantage of requesting them to work. Some people probably have other points of views to this while I would say that paying salary to teenagers can make them feel satisfied and encourages them to work diligently. Therefore, not only has it a lot of positive benefits to younger, but would be able to build up much energetic community.
Another factor is that teenagers should get paid for servicing in community because it can help them to take responsibility for their living cost and learn how to be independent. The fact that when working for people, the majority of younger can understand each money they earn is not easy to obtain so they would be likely to use it wisely. For example, it is particularly true that most parents pay children for their tuition. As a result, some younger does not study hard since the money is not they earn from it and they do not really care about.
In conclusion, although younger plays an important role in servicing the humanity, people should treat them as employee to pay salary. This is because doing so can support them to work hard as well as cherished their money and all of these have a definite positive impact on our community.
There is no doubt that the society will become much better if young volunteers are participating in helping other
people
or the environment.
However
, despite
many
agree
with doing
so
, I do not believe that
teenagers
should assist the society for free.
Firstly
, if the number of
younger
does almost the same jobs as
companies
' employees, there is no point allowing them to do
so
without getting paid.
Even though
they are
still
young and do no have as much experience as professionals, it does not mean
people
can take advantage of requesting them to work.
Some
people
probably
have other points of views to this while I would say that paying salary to
teenagers
can
make
them feel satisfied and encourages them to work
diligently
.
Therefore
, not
only
has it
a lot of
positive
benefits to
younger
,
but
would be able to build up much energetic community.
Another factor is that
teenagers
should
get
paid for servicing in community
because
it can
help
them to take responsibility for their living cost and learn how to be independent. The fact that when working for
people
, the majority of
younger
can understand each money they earn is not easy to obtain
so
they would be likely to
use
it
wisely
.
For example
, it is
particularly
true that most parents pay children for their tuition.
As a result
,
some
younger
does not study
hard
since the money is not they earn from
it and
they do not
really
care about.
In conclusion
, although
younger
plays an
important
role in servicing the humanity,
people
should treat them as employee to pay salary. This is
because
doing
so
can support them to work
hard
as well
as cherished their money and all of these have a
definite
positive
impact on our community.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes