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The students have a lot of better things why they still quit the school?

The students have a lot of better things why they still quit the school? aQQq7
Education is one of the most important institutions in modern life. there are more opportunities for Education now, but others to stop learning or give up school instead. in my opinion, the students cannot continue their study due to having many negative reasons. the following paragraphs will give the reason and support for them. firstly, it takes so much time to study. to the well-conditioned students learning will be a boring thing and make them cannot do anything else because they can depend on their family if they stop learning. For example, one person lives in rich family. Although he is not good at study and does not want to go to school anymore, he still has a wealthy parents who willing to help him to get a good job without knowledge. so the students will spend their study time in order to do something better such as play games, have vacations and so on. secondly, they have no longer the purpose of continuing go to school. in the past, if someone got a degree or diploma, they could have are a decent job. in this day and age, the life is filled with excellent conditions weather getting a professional degree or not is not needed anymore. Students who can buy a fake degree, And quit school without doing their best to following College classroom. Their pupose sent forward how to successful start-up or what jobs earns much time for their lives. So, ther primarily aims have been changed by the virtual ones. in conclusion, modern student have many different thoughts about learning that dropping out of school is easily recognition. The more the world modern, the more the students develop. The students will be responsible for their life so let them decide that.
Education is one of the most
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important
institutions in modern life.
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there
are more opportunities for Education
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now
,
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but
others to
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stop
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learning
or give up
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school
instead
.
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in
my opinion, the
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students
cannot continue their
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study
due to having
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many
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negative
reasons.
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the
following paragraphs will give the reason and support for them.

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firstly
, it takes
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so
much time to
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study
.
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to
the well-conditioned
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students
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learning
will be a boring thing and
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make
them cannot do anything else
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because
they can depend on their family if they
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stop
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learning
.
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, one person
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lives
in rich family. Although he is not
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good
at
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study
and does not want to go to
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school
anymore, he
still
has a wealthy
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parents
who willing to
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help
him to
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get
a
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good
job without knowledge.
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so
the
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students
will spend their
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study
time in order to do something better such as play games, have vacations and
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so
on.

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secondly
, they have no longer the purpose of continuing go to
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school
.
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in
the past, if someone
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got
a degree or diploma, they could have
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are
a decent job.
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in
this day and age, the life
is filled
with excellent conditions weather getting a professional degree or
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not is not
needed anymore.
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Students
who can
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buy
a fake degree, And quit
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school
without doing their best to following College classroom. Their
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pupose
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forward how to successful
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-up or what jobs
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earns
much time for their
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lives
.
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,
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ther
primarily
aims have been
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changed
by the virtual ones.

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in
conclusion, modern
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student
have
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many
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different
thoughts about
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learning
that dropping out of
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school
is
easily
recognition. The more the world modern, the more the
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students
develop. The
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students
will be responsible for their life
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so
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let
them decide that.
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IELTS essay The students have a lot of better things why they still quit the school?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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