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The story and dream about me

The story and dream about me EL91M
Hello my name is mo, I 22 year old, i from thailand, i graduate bachelor at kingmongkuit technology north bangkok, in physic industrial and medical equiment, biomedical engineering branch, I have intership at Ramatibodi hospital and sometime I will help teacher at university and Rajaviti hospital and I have 1 brother. he is dell. my goal, I want to graduate Doctorate in Biomedical Engineering because I have 2 reason to answer. The first Now the world have new virus and other new virus, it kill Many people and Medical device it is best to way used to stop its, Seccond I want to make best student of Biomedical Engineer in the Future Thailand will go to the first in aisa in topic Medical Device. So after I graduate bachelor, I will train English skill and Other Skill to used to graduate Doctorate. Finally I know my dream it is very hard But If I have more train and ambitious than. I will go to my dream complete. but sometime I think to want to live normalize same other people or I want to ordain because I like religion and this is my story. thank you
Hello my name is mo, I 22 year
old
, i from
thailand
,
i
graduate
bachelor at
kingmongkuit
technology north
bangkok
, in physic industrial and medical
equiment
, biomedical engineering branch, I have
intership
at
Ramatibodi
hospital and sometime I will
help
teacher at university and
Rajaviti
hospital and I have 1 brother.
he
is dell.
my
goal, I
want
to
graduate
Doctorate in Biomedical Engineering
because
I have 2 reason to answer. The
first
Now
the world have new virus and other new virus, it
kill
Many
people
and Medical device it is best to way
used
to
stop
its,
Seccond
I
want
to
make best
student of Biomedical Engineer in the Future Thailand will go to the
first
in
aisa
in topic Medical Device.
So
after I
graduate
bachelor, I will train English
skill
and Other
Skill
to
used
to
graduate
Doctorate.
Finally
I know my dream it is
very
hard
But
If I have more train and ambitious than. I will go to my dream complete.
but
sometime I
think
to
want
to
live
normalize same other
people
or I
want
to ordain
because
I like religion and this is my story.
thank
you
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IELTS essay The story and dream about me

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