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The story about Eric and may

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The jobs of the lawyer is represent client, anyway they can suffer charged every guilty even when the fault is ridiculous. Example like thisEric and his lawyer with may and her lawyer already convened put settle one problem. Eric is claiming money from May, but May doesn’t want receive it for him, she had a great reasons. Eric was broken into May’s house to commit robbery and both of act all is crime, security is may house quite good, so the easiest way to get into the house is through a lantern l, a window on kitchen attic. While may is sleeping, a thief is opening lantern and jumping into kitchen. He was fail on bar where has the knife which stick is his thigh, so Eric was went to the hospital and then had throw in jail
The jobs of the lawyer is
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represent
client, anyway they can suffer charged every guilty even when the fault is ridiculous. Example like
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thisEric
and his lawyer with may and her lawyer already convened put settle one problem. Eric is claiming money from May,
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but
May doesn’t
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want receive
it for him, she had a great reasons. Eric
was broken
into May’s
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house
to commit robbery and both of act all is crime, security is may
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house
quite
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good
,
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so
the easiest way to
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get
into the
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house
is through a lantern l, a window on kitchen attic. While may is sleeping, a thief is opening lantern and jumping into kitchen. He was fail on bar where has the knife which stick is his thigh,
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so
Eric was
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went
to the hospital and then had throw in
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jail

IELTS essay The story about Eric and may

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
137 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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