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the star fruit tree and two brothers

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Once upon a time, there were two brothers whose parents died early. They worked in an industrious way, therefore, they had enough fortune to make ends meet. Because of wanted a happier life, they got married. However, since the elder brother had a wife, he became lazy, all of the heavy work was done by the younger brother and his wife. Although the younger couple must do all the affairs, they didn’t complain about anything and still be joyful with what they had. They not only stayed up late and got up early but also tried to do the tilling, weed, and put down fertilizer. Therefore, they had a blessed harvest and had enough rice for their life. The lazy elder brother was afraid the younger brother would take over more property than he did, thus, he was so nervous and discussed with his wife. Finally, they decided to let the younger couple get their own place. The younger brother and his wife were given a bad-conditional cottage that had a sweet star fruit tree. The younger couple didn’t say any lament. They not only chopped wood and sold it in the market but are also hired to earn money. On the other hand, the elder brother let all of his arable lands for rent, so that he could be leisured with his wife. Because the younger couple didn’t say any complaints, the elder brother assumed his brother was thick-headed, therefore, he didn’t visit the younger brother’s house and took no notice of him. It could be said that the happiest day of the younger couple was the day the star fruit tree was ripened. They cultivated and caught insects such as worms and ants all year round. As a result, the tree was verdant, the shadow covered the small garden. It weighed down with so many fruits that they can be picked up by hand. One morning, the younger brother and his wife pick the star fruits to sell in the market, they accidentally saw a big bird was eating the fruits. Although it eyed the younger couple, it continued to eat leisurely and then, flew. Since then, every morning, the bird came to their house to eat fruits, for nearly a month. Therefore, the amount of the star fruits decreased significantly. One day, when the bird finished its meal, the wife said with a sad voice: “My house only has the tree to rely on. If you eat all of them, how can we earn money to buy rice? ” And it answered: “Eat one, return the gold department. Making three-gang bag, take it away”. The bird repeated this sentence three times and then flew. The younger couple heard the statement, despite being heard very clearly, they are still so confused and wavering. But finally, they followed the bird’s words. the wife sewed a three-gang bag by the old brown clothes. The next morning, when the younger brother finished his breakfast, there was a strong wind in the yard. The bird was in there, it make some sounds as if greeting. The husband brought the three-gang bag and went out. The bird lay down and gestured for him to climb up. The bird flapped its wings and flew up to the sky. When it flew high, that was like the clouds covered the gigantic bird, whereas, at low altitude, it skim the green forest and the rolling mountain. Then, it flew to the ocean, the waves moved and hit the cliff, which created the dazzling white sponge. Finally, it landed on an island have a large amount of stone: the white stone, the green stone, the red stone, and even the iridescent stone. They reflected the striking light which the younger brother has never seen before. The bird was down slowly at a cave. When the younger brother placed his foot on the island, he eyed everywhere and found out that there were no creatures. The bird made signs for him to go into the cave. At the cave door, he saw the glasses, the ambers, and diamonds. They had all of the colors such as green like cat’s eyes, red like the sun and jewelry was countless. The cave was deep and large, so the younger brother didn’t dare to go into it. He just took away a little of gold and diamonds. And then, he put them into the bag and motion to the bird to come back. The bird nodded its head, made some sounds and flapped its wings, then flew into the sky, through the ocean and forest. When the sun was high in the sky, the bird landed in the small yard which had the star fruit tree. Having seen the husband was safe, the wife was extremely jubilated and she stroked the birds’ feathers to express her gratitude. Then, she invited the bird to eat star fruits. After a while, the bird made three sounds to greet the younger couple and flew. Since then, the bird went to their home to eat once in a while. The rumor that the younger couple was suddenly well-off reached the ears of the elder brother. The older couple visited his brother’s house to probe. The younger brother told the whole of the truth. Then, the elder brother convinced the younger one to commute all of his property for the old cottage and the sweet star fruit tree. They were nervous that the younger couple didn’t agree; however, the young couple approved cheerfully immediately. The older couple were really jubilated, after giving all their fortune, the next morning, they moved to the younger brother’s house. They did nothing but sit in the yard and eyed the star fruit tree all day. They were waiting for the bird. One morning, they saw the treetops trembled and panic-stricken rushed. As a matter of fact, the big bird was there. The bird just ate some fruits, they said: “Our house has only the tree to rely on. If you eat all of them, how can we live? ” And it replied: “Eat one, return the gold department. Making three-gang bag, take it away”. Then, it flew. The older couple was extremely happy, worshipped the bird, and discussed to each other how to sew the bad. In the beginning, they intended to sew a lot of bags, but they worried that the bird didn’t agree to go, so they just sewed one bag, but this bag was triple the three-gang bag. The next morning, the elder brother was having breakfast. He saw the bird and skipped it to take the big bag and then went out in a rush, whereas the wife worshipped the bird incessantly. The bird flew into the sky, through the ocean and forest, and it also landed on the golden island. The elder brother was dazzled with the iridescence of many kinds of diamonds and gemstone. When he when into the cave, he was more bewitched, even forgot the hungry feeling, he just tried his best to pick up the gold and stuff it into the bag. The sleeve and trouser leg were also full of gold. It was so much that he couldn’t get out of the cave. Until it was nearly the decline of day, he drag the bag towards the place where the bird was waiting for. The bird flapped its wings and flew. But it was too heavy, it flew a short stretch of road, the bird swoop down. It called: “Throw little of gold to the sea! ” Due to having regretted his property, the elder brother not only didn’t take away any gold but also bound it into the bird’s wings. It became windier, the leaden wave was rising. The bird was exhausted and leaned its wings. The bid bag was pushed, the elder brother fell into the ocean. In the blink of an eye, the elder brother was caught by a wave and pulled under the deep ocean by the bag and the sleeve, trouser leg full of gold. The bird was wet for a time and then it rose up the water and flew back to the mountain and forest. It is obvious that because of greed, the elder brother didn’t save his life while the younger couple, whose good-natured and plain personality have a wealthy and happy life ever after.
Once upon a time, there were two
brothers
whose parents
died
early. They worked
in an industrious way
,
therefore
, they had
enough
fortune to
make
ends
meet
.
Because
of wanted a happier life, they
got
married.
However
, since the
elder
brother
had a
wife
, he became lazy,
all of the
heavy work
was done
by the
younger
brother
and his wife.

Although the
younger
couple
must
do all the affairs, they didn’t complain about anything and
still
be joyful with what they had. They not
only
stayed up late and
got
up early
but
also
tried to do the tilling, weed, and put
down
fertilizer.
Therefore
, they had a blessed harvest and had
enough
rice for their life.

The lazy
elder
brother
was afraid the
younger
brother
would take over more property than he did,
thus
, he was
so
nervous and discussed with his
wife
.
Finally
, they decided to
let
the
younger
couple
get
their
own
place.

The
younger
brother
and his
wife
were
given
a
bad
-conditional cottage that had a sweet star
fruit
tree
. The
younger
couple
didn’t say any lament. They not
only
chopped wood and sold it in the market
but
are
also
hired to earn money.

On the other hand
, the
elder
brother
let
all of his arable lands for rent,
so
that he could
be leisured
with his
wife
.
Because
the
younger
couple
didn’t say any complaints, the
elder
brother
assumed his
brother
was thick-headed,
therefore
, he didn’t visit the
younger
brother’s
house
and took no notice of him.

It could
be said
that the happiest day of the
younger
couple
was the day the star
fruit
tree
was ripened
. They cultivated and caught insects such as worms and ants all year round.

As a result
, the
tree
was verdant, the shadow covered the
small
garden. It weighed
down
with
so
many
fruits
that they can
be picked
up by hand.

One
morning
, the
younger
brother
and his
wife
pick the star
fruits
to sell in the market, they
accidentally
saw
a
big
bird
was eating the
fruits
. Although it eyed the
younger
couple
, it continued to
eat
leisurely
and then,
flew
. Since then, every
morning
, the
bird
came to their
house
to
eat
fruits
, for
nearly
a month.
Therefore
, the amount of the star
fruits
decreased
significantly
.

One day, when the
bird
finished its meal, the
wife
said with a sad voice: “My
house
only
has the
tree
to rely on. If you
eat
all of them, how can we earn money to
buy
rice? ” And it answered:
“Eat
one, return the gold department. Making three-gang
bag
, take it
away”
. The
bird
repeated this sentence three times and then flew.

The
younger
couple
heard the statement, despite
being heard
very
clearly
, they are
still
so
confused and wavering.
But
finally
, they followed the
bird’s
words.
the
wife
sewed a three-gang
bag
by the
old
brown clothes.

The
next
morning
, when the
younger
brother
finished his breakfast, there was a strong wind in the yard. The
bird
was in there, it
make
some
sounds as if greeting.

The
husband brought the three-gang
bag
and went out.
The
bird
lay
down
and gestured for him to climb up.
The
bird
flapped its wings and
flew
up to the sky. When it
flew
high, that was like the clouds covered the gigantic
bird
, whereas, at low altitude, it
skim
the green forest and the rolling mountain. Then, it
flew
to the
ocean
, the waves
moved
and hit the cliff, which created the dazzling white sponge.

Finally
, it landed on an island have a large amount of
stone
: the white
stone
, the green
stone
, the red
stone
, and even the iridescent
stone
. They reflected the striking light which the
younger
brother
has never
seen
before
.

The
bird
was
down
slowly
at a
cave
. When the
younger
brother
placed his foot on the island, he eyed everywhere and found out that there were no creatures. The
bird
made signs for him to go into the
cave
. At the
cave
door, he
saw
the glasses, the
ambers
, and diamonds. They had
all of the
colors such as green like cat’s eyes, red like the sun and jewelry was countless.

The
cave
was deep and large,
so
the
younger
brother
didn’t dare to go into it. He
just
took
away
a
little
of gold and diamonds. And then, he put them into the
bag
and motion to the
bird
to
come
back.

The
bird
nodded its head, made
some
sounds and flapped its wings, then
flew
into the sky, through the
ocean
and forest. When the sun was high in the sky, the
bird
landed in the
small
yard which had the star
fruit
tree
. Having
seen
the husband was safe, the
wife
was
extremely
jubilated and
she stroked the
birds’
feathers to express her gratitude. Then, she invited the
bird
to
eat
star
fruits
. After a while, the
bird
made three sounds to greet the
younger
couple
and
flew
. Since then, the
bird
went to their home to
eat
once in a while.

The rumor that the
younger
couple
was
suddenly
well-off reached the ears of the
elder
brother
. The older
couple
visited his
brother’s
house
to probe.
The
younger
brother
told
the whole of the truth. Then, the
elder
brother
convinced the
younger
one to commute all of his property for the
old
cottage and the sweet star
fruit
tree
. They were nervous that the
younger
couple
didn’t
agree
;
however
, the young
couple
approved
cheerfully
immediately.

The older
couple
were
really
jubilated
, after giving all their fortune, the
next
morning
, they
moved
to the
younger
brother’s
house
. They did nothing
but
sit in the yard and eyed the star
fruit
tree
all day. They were waiting for the bird.

One
morning
, they
saw
the treetops trembled and panic-stricken rushed. As a matter of fact, the
big
bird
was there. The
bird
just
ate
some
fruits
, they said: “Our
house
has
only
the
tree
to rely on. If you
eat
all of them, how can we
live
? ” And it replied:
“Eat
one, return the gold department. Making three-gang
bag
, take it
away”
. Then, it flew.

The older
couple
was
extremely
happy,
worshipped
the
bird
, and discussed to each other how to sew the
bad
. In the beginning, they intended to sew
a lot of
bags
,
but
they worried that the
bird
didn’t
agree
to go,
so
they
just
sewed one
bag
,
but
this
bag
was triple the three-gang bag.

The
next
morning
, the
elder
brother
was having breakfast. He
saw
the
bird
and skipped it to take the
big
bag
and then went out in a rush, whereas the
wife
worshipped
the
bird
incessantly
. The
bird
flew
into the sky, through the
ocean
and forest, and it
also
landed on the golden island.

The
elder
brother
was dazzled
with the iridescence of
many
kinds of diamonds and gemstone. When he when into the
cave
, he was more bewitched, even forgot the hungry feeling, he
just
tried his best to pick up the gold and stuff it into the
bag
. The sleeve and trouser leg were
also
full of gold. It was
so
much that he couldn’t
get
out of the
cave
. Until it was
nearly
the decline of day, he
drag
the
bag
towards the place where the
bird
was waiting for.

The
bird
flapped its wings and
flew
.
But
it was too heavy, it
flew
a short stretch of road, the
bird
swoop
down
. It called: “Throw
little
of gold to the sea! ”

Due to having regretted his property, the
elder
brother
not
only
didn’t take
away
any gold
but
also
bound it into the
bird’s
wings.

It became windier, the leaden wave was rising. The
bird
was exhausted
and leaned its wings. The bid
bag
was pushed
, the
elder
brother
fell into the ocean.

In the blink of an eye, the
elder
brother
was caught
by a wave and pulled under the deep
ocean
by the
bag
and the sleeve, trouser leg full of gold. The
bird
was wet for a time and then it rose up the water and
flew
back to the mountain and forest.

It is obvious that
because
of greed, the
elder
brother
didn’t save his life while the
younger
couple
, whose
good
-natured and plain personality have a wealthy and happy life ever after.
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IELTS essay the star fruit tree and two brothers

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