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The role of education on our life

The role of education on our life oEng9
Education takes in knowledge for learners and qualification seekers to introduce versatile persons to a fast-changing society at the time being. The education system is the cornerstones of each country and it ought to possess a collection of novel knowledge for all audiences ranging from pupils to university graduates. Does the education system of each country offers equal pre-primary and higher education opportunities for all, it will soon become a welfare society. Based on World Economic Forum data, education has placed a premium on the government yearly budget, furthermore, the level of the education system is the basic argument for categorizing development countries. On the other hand, the enterprise tendency to recruit youngsters who can do various array of jobs bring about a revolution in tertiary education. To keep abreast of the educational model in the years ahead, governments attempt to encourage the private sector to invest in this area. Not only does it can introducing new opportunities for the education system, but it also creates a relaxed atmosphere for the development of students. edX and Coursera are some of the new platforms that include massive open online courses, specializations, degrees, professional and master track courses. Thanks to these platforms, in recent years, distance learning has received wide currency among qualification seekers. It should be noted that distance learning requires commitment from students because it proceeds in the absence of professional academics. Albeit sitting in front of the computer for several hours in succession might fuel physical problems, but for university graduates in developing countries creates a unique opportunity. Besides, students possess the chance to organize teamwork and develop interpersonal relationships. To this end, our government also ought to provide the necessary infrastructure to access these platforms for all students. To put in a nutshell, it is very necessary for the government will place a premium on the plans for reforming and for continuing lackluster performance of the education system.
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takes in knowledge for learners and qualification seekers to introduce versatile persons to a
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fast
-changing society at the time being. The
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education
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system
is the cornerstones of each
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country
and it ought to possess a collection of novel knowledge for all audiences ranging from pupils to university graduates. Does the
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education
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system
of each
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country
offers equal
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pre-primary
and higher
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opportunities for all, it will
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soon
become a welfare society. Based on World Economic Forum data,
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education
has placed a premium on the
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government
yearly budget,
furthermore
, the level of the
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education
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system
is the basic argument for categorizing development
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countries
.
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, the enterprise tendency to recruit youngsters who can do various array of jobs bring about a revolution in tertiary
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education
. To
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keep
abreast of the educational model in the years ahead,
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governments
attempt to encourage the private sector to invest in this area. Not
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does it can
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introducing
new opportunities for the
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system
,
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creates a relaxed atmosphere for the development of
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edX
and Coursera are
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new platforms that include massive open online courses, specializations, degrees, professional and master
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track
courses. Thanks to these platforms, in recent years, distance learning has received wide currency among qualification seekers. It should
be noted
that distance learning requires commitment from
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students
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because
it proceeds in the absence of professional academics. Albeit sitting in front of the computer for several hours in succession might fuel physical problems,
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but
for university graduates in developing
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countries
creates a unique opportunity.
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,
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students
possess the chance to organize teamwork and develop interpersonal relationships. To this
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end
, our
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government
also
ought to provide the necessary infrastructure to access these platforms for all
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students
. To put in a nutshell, it is
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very
necessary for the
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will place a premium on the plans for reforming and for continuing lackluster performance of the
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education
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.
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IELTS essay The role of education on our life

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
320 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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