It is undoubtedly true that the prime aim of the educational system is preparing youngsters for the future. While it may seem like a good idea to eliminate Art and Music from schools and teach other theoritical subjects such as Information Technology instead, I completely disagree.
First of all, Art can improve pupils’ creativity and enhance their memory. This is mainly because Art provokes children to utilize their imagination abilities frequently which solidates the neural network related to creativity in their brains. Moreover, most Art students have to visualize what they are going to work at first and then they work from their memories which strengthens their long-term memory. In 2009, for instance, a study was conducted on artists by Harvard University showed that artists have the same IQ level as Math scientists and less likely to have Alzheimer when they grow up.
In addition, music can reduce violence among students. This is due to its sedating effect on pupils’ brains which makes them feel safe and unstressed. In Kenya, for example, when they introduced music as a seperate subject to primary school students, violence among them dropped by 50%. In contrast, if educational authorities replaced music by other subject, pupils would be stressed for longer hours which can lead to violence; teaching music should be obligatory in all public and private schools.
To conclude, due to their benefits such as improving students’ creativity and decreasing violence among pupils, I completely believe that Art and Music must be taught in all schools.
It is
undoubtedly
true that the prime aim of the educational system is preparing youngsters for the future. While it may seem like a
good
idea
to eliminate
Art
and
Music
from schools and teach other
theoritical
subjects such as Information Technology
instead
, I completely disagree.
First of all
,
Art
can
improve
pupils’
creativity and enhance their memory. This is
mainly
because
Art
provokes children to utilize their imagination abilities
frequently
which
solidates
the neural network related to creativity in their brains.
Moreover
, most
Art
students
have to
visualize what they are going to work at
first and
then they work from their memories which strengthens their long-term memory. In 2009,
for instance
, a study
was conducted
on artists by Harvard University
showed
that artists have the same IQ level as Math scientists and less likely to have Alzheimer when they grow up.
In addition
,
music
can
reduce
violence
among
students
. This is due to its sedating effect on
pupils’
brains which
makes
them feel safe and unstressed. In Kenya,
for example
, when they introduced
music
as a
seperate
subject to primary school
students
,
violence
among them dropped by 50%.
In contrast
, if educational authorities replaced
music
by other subject,
pupils
would be
stressed
for longer hours which can lead to
violence
; teaching
music
should be obligatory in all public and private schools.
To conclude
, due to their benefits such as improving
students’
creativity and decreasing
violence
among
pupils
, I completely believe that
Art
and
Music
must
be taught
in all schools.
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