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the responsibilities stakeholders have in companies that implement business practices that benefit society such as corporate social responsibility (CSR).

the responsibilities stakeholders have in companies that implement business practices that benefit society such as corporate social responsibility (CSR). MrOoq
Companies responsible for not only its stakeholders or stockholders but also for society. Doesn’t it hears like a “corporate owners are responsible for society”. Because they are the people who make decision of the company. So, It means the stockholders have responsible for social. Moreover, they have responsible for environment. Once we have known it, we have to know how they make decisions, in other hand what are the factors of their decision. First of all and obviously their choice is based on earnings. If they don’t take care on income who cares it? Secondly, they must notice social rating, it will be a self-reliant appraisal of an organization’s social conduction using a standardized rating scale – in terms of the ‘risk of not reaching social mission’ or ‘the likelihood of contributing social value’¹. Nowadays, in business world we often uses the acronym “CSR”. So what is means? CSR stands for corporate social responsibility, which is significant factor of successful company. Also it helps companies to be a conscious of what their impact on aspects of society, involving social, economic and environmental. Doing something for the society is good, but why they need to do these works that spends income, which is their priority. Are they doing it because they really love us? Maybe. Nevertheless, I don’t think so. They do these because it is a chance to advertise the company and products. Moreover, some law requires them to do something for social benefit. Even though these reasons are enough to do something for social prosperity, these are not main reason. It is expected to convince the customers that ‘the company is reliable and responsible’. Alan Greenspan once said “When trust is lost, a nations ability to transact business is palpably undermined”, which implies business is based on trust. Most of companies believe loyal purchasers are less price sensitive. Research shows the more loyal a customer tends to be, the higher customer profitability is obtained². In my vision that is the reason why they striving to be a leader in CSR. CSR not only supposed to gain customers belief but also help company. In business world “Starbucks” is leader in CSR. CSR can build competitive advantage over competitors that Starbucks gain more competitive advantage by engaging in CSR into every part the company. Specially, the corporate concentrates on their suppliers (coffee farmers) and partners (employees) which they have run business as consistently together³. CSR makes employees and employers to feel more connected to the environment and inspire them by showing how they are impacting society, economics etc. That is the secret of why “Starbucks” is leading in CSR while others striving to lead. This paper discussed that the stockholders have responsibilities for social benefit. To conclude the researches show that companies have responsibilities for social benefit and they need to implement business practices such as CSR. Moreover, “Starbucks” example shows us CSR helps company, it increases their income and raises morale. In the other hand stakeholders receiving benefit from CSR.
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society
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society”
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company
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obviously
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on earnings. If they don’t take care on income who cares it?
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notice
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conduction using a standardized rating scale
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in terms of the ‘
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risk
of not reaching
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mission’ or ‘the likelihood of contributing
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value’¹. Nowadays, in
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business
world we
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the acronym “CSR”.
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what is means? CSR stands for corporate
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responsibility, which is significant factor of successful
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company
.
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companies
to be a conscious of what their impact on aspects of
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, involving
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social
, economic and environmental.

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good
,
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they
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and products.
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,
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law requires them to do something for
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social
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benefit
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to do something for
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prosperity, these are not main reason. It is
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customers
that ‘the
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company
is reliable and
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. Alan Greenspan once said “When trust
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, a
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ability to transact
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business
is
palpably
undermined”, which implies
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business
is based
on trust. Most of
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companies
believe loyal purchasers are less price sensitive. Research
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shows
the more loyal a
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tends to be, the higher
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profitability is
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obtained²
. In my vision
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they striving
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CSR not
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belief
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help
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. In
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business
world “Starbucks” is leader in CSR. CSR can build competitive advantage over competitors that Starbucks gain more competitive advantage by engaging in CSR into every part the
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company
.
Specially
, the corporate concentrates on their suppliers (coffee farmers) and partners (employees) which they have run
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business
as
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together³
. CSR
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makes
employees and employers to feel more connected to the environment and inspire them by showing how they are impacting
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society
, economics etc.
That is
the secret of why “Starbucks” is leading in CSR while others striving to lead.

This paper discussed that the stockholders have responsibilities for
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social
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benefit
.
To conclude
the researches
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show
that
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companies
have responsibilities for
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social
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benefit and
they need to implement
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business
practices such as CSR.
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, “Starbucks” example
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shows
us CSR
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helps
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company
, it increases their income and raises morale. In the other hand stakeholders receiving
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benefit
from CSR.
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IELTS essay the responsibilities stakeholders have in companies that implement business practices that benefit society such as corporate social responsibility (CSR).

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
500 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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