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People have been arguing about whether or not government should to advance the methods to live with climate change instead of putting forward solutions to preclude it.

People have been arguing about whether or not government should to advance the methods to live with climate change instead of putting forward solutions to preclude it. NlO8W
People have been arguing about whether or not government should to advance the methods to live with climate change instead of putting forward solutions to preclude it. While there are some great supports for that belief, from my point of view, I totally disagree with it because of the following reasons. On the one hand, the opinion is that finding a way to live with climate change being attractive for several reasons. The primary reason is global climate change started a few decades ago and is still going on. Therefore, some individuals think that it is impossible to avert the catastrophe, so they choose to live with it. In addition, saving sources is one of the reasons also. Renovating the environment takes much resources of a nation such as time, costs and human resources while the Administration can use this means to investment the quality of the citizens’s life or the economy development. On the other hand, there are a variety of reasons why I believe the government should offer a measures to curb a problem caused by climate changer as soon as possible. First of all, climate change exert a negative impact directly on the public and the environment. Climate change causes phenomena like global warning, changes in climate conditions and rapidly increasing cacbon dioxin, which has seriously affect on ecosystems, water resources, air, food and cause a direct threat to human health. Secondly the economic damage caused by climate change is also increase. In others words, major storms have an adverse effect on agriculture industry that costing a wide range of expenses; in addition, to control the disease spreading after each storm and flood also requires a huge amount of money. In conclusion, as reasons metioned above. I strongly believe, the government needs to come up with solutions to prevent global climate change.
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whether or not
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government
should to advance the methods to
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climate
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instead
of putting forward solutions to preclude it. While there are
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some
great supports for that belief, from my point of view, I
totally
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of the following reasons.

On the one hand, the opinion is that finding a way to
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with
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climate
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change
being attractive for several
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reasons
. The primary
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reason
is global
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climate
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change
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started
a few decades ago and is
still
going on.
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,
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some
individuals
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think
that it is impossible to avert the catastrophe,
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so
they choose to
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live
with it.
In addition
, saving sources is one of the
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reasons
also
. Renovating the environment takes
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much
resources of a nation such as time, costs and human resources while the Administration can
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this means to investment the quality of the
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citizens’s
life or the economy development.

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, there are a variety of
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reasons
why I believe the
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government
should offer
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to curb a problem caused by
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changer as
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as possible.
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,
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exert a
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impact
directly
on the public and the environment.
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change
causes phenomena like global warning,
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in
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conditions and
rapidly
increasing
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cacbon
dioxin, which has
seriously
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affect
on ecosystems, water resources, air, food and cause a direct threat to human health.
Secondly
the economic damage caused by
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climate
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change
is
also
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increase
. In others words, major storms have an adverse effect on agriculture industry that costing a wide range of expenses;
in addition
, to control the disease spreading after each storm and flood
also
requires a huge amount of money.

In conclusion
, as
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metioned
above. I
strongly
believe, the
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needs to
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up with solutions to
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prevent
global
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climate
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IELTS essay People have been arguing about whether or not government should to advance the methods to live with climate change instead of putting forward solutions to preclude it.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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